ThisAdamGuy
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So, in the chapter I'm working on in Henry Rider 3, Henry and her friends have been trapped inside their world's version of D&D, and they have to steal something from a colony of penguimps (half penguin, half goblin). I decided it would be funny if the penguimps could only say "WONK!" but I'm a little worried that it might come across as annoying. They're only here for this one chapter. Here's a piece of it. What do you think, do I need to scale it back?
“Well, hi there!” I said as cheerfully as I could. “What’s your name, little guy?”
“WONK WONK WONK!” it wonked in response, pointing one of its wings at me. “WONK WONK?”
“He says that we have trespassed on his people's sacred land,” Yin whispered, “and asks why he shouldn't have us all eviscerated right now.”
I turned to look at her in surprise. “You speak penguimp?”
She shrugged, her eyes never leaving the penguimp in front of us. “There aren’t many languages out there that I can’t speak, Rhyen.”
“WONK WONK!”
“And he wants you to stop ignoring him,” she added.
I put my hands on my hips and smiled at the penguimp. “I want to tell you a joke!”
Behind me, I heard Yin and Hamstring both slap their foreheads.
“WONK WONK,” wonked the penguimp. “WONK WONKWONKWONK WONK.”