Which format is better?

ThisAdamGuy

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This is the part of my litrpg wip omg bbq where the character unlocks the ability to craft items, and his system gives him a list of blueprints he has access to. In terms of readability, both for this section and any future ones, which do you like better? All the blueprints just being listed together, or with an em-dash in between to separate them?
LVL 1 BLUEPRINTS UNLOCKED:
WOODEN SPEAR
WOODEN HAMMER
WOODEN CLUB
WOODEN BOW
WOODEN ARROW
WOODEN DAGGER
WOODEN SHIELD
STONE SPEAR
STONE AXE
STONE HAMMER
STONE ARROW

STONE DAGGER
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LVL 1 BLUEPRINTS UNLOCKED:
WOODEN SPEAR

WOODEN HAMMER

WOODEN CLUB

WOODEN BOW

WOODEN ARROW

WOODEN DAGGER

WOODEN SHIELD

STONE SPEAR

STONE AXE

STONE HAMMER

STONE ARROW

STONE DAGGER
 

CharlesEBrown

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As resident Contrarian, I'd be more prone to go with something like:

LVL 1 BLUEPRINTS UNLOCKED:
WOODEN items: SPEAR; HAMMER; CLUB, BOW, ARROW, DAGGER, SHIELD
STONE items: SPEAR, AXE, HAMMER, ARROW, DAGGER

As an aside, crafting bow and arrows are usually a very different skill from melee weapons (by the way, there is something called a "Stone Bow" - but it is not a bow MADE of stone) - e.g. usually "Bowyer/Fletcher" as opposed to "Weaponsmith."
And is a "stone arrow" and arrowhead or an arrow made entirely out of stone?
 

ArcanePunkster

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Can't you make tables in your chapters? Haven't used the writing side of ScribbleHub for a while, so I might be out of touch with that info.
 

triflight

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#2 is definitely more readable but I would suggest considering something like what CharlesEBrown suggested. It looks like there's a lot of repition so something more succinct is probably good.

If blueprints are unlocked based on form and are available for every material type (I.e. unlocking the spear blueprint means you can craft it with wood, stone, iron, steel, silver, gold, etc) then you could do something form based like:

SPEAR (Wood, Stone, Iron)
HAMMER (Wood, Stone, Iron)

Just suggestions!
 
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