Well, go to hell with your feedback.

[foxes]

It doesn't matter. It's just another topic to skip. It's sad to see how people are waiting for at least some kind of opinion. And they come across ignore.

In general, here is my option. It's not abandoned. It's just that I don't post a continuation and I want to do another story - an alternative continuation with new characters. And sometimes I correct this one.

Go to Hell

A self-sufficient man, whose life has not been without difficult situations, on the threshold of mankind's entry into a new era of interstellar travel, gets into minor troubles. Overnight his life slides to the bottom, from where the knocking starts again, and so it goes on until he wakes up...

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Here's a brief story with spoilers: A man is kidnapped by a pharmaceutical company. He is subjected to experiments, but a catastrophe occurs. He is forgotten. He wakes up, believing he is not in his own body or on Earth. However, he discovers that he has been asleep for 1,000 years. Plus or minus. He comes across surviving natives and a strange bunker signal. Foolishly, he goes there, where he is subjected to another deadly experiment.

There is a sequel. Most of the story is left out because it is written in the first person. It is similar to survival with isekai elements. It's mostly an adventure. The main highlight is the revelation of the hero's origins and the catastrophe. In some places, the story is full of philosophy or reflection. It's a shame if the story itself is interesting, but the barrier of storytelling is not overcome.

 

[Failnot]

Some mysterious force has turned me towards this thread

I'll give my feedback sometime today :)

 

[Failnot]

Here is the promised feedback:

To start with the synopsis, it's pretty good I'd say. It does its job in giving a good idea about what to expect from the story and the kind of cast we'll have, not much to say here. I'll give my thoughts chapter by chapter before giving a sum-up.

Chapter 1: It's a good character introduction. Very directly, we're given a nice sum up of what's made the main character who he is. But, I don't think this is entirely a good thing. It feels like we've had his entire view on the world laid out to us right at the start, whereas it might've been better to have it be illuminated through the course of the story? Regardless, he's a very realistic character (you could probably find a lot of older men just like him. Is that why he's left nameless?) and the ending of the chapter is a nifty plot twist that prompts you to continue onto the next chapter. Barely any grammatical errors from what I could tell, but that's definitely not my strong suit.

Chapter 2: "Even names nowadays nobody uttered and introduced themselves."

Neat.

In this chapter, the scheme around our protagonist becomes very clear. The charges he's given are clearly trumped up and false, and nobody can seem to do anything about it. The plot seems pretty sharp which is always nice to see. One criticism I'd have is that at times where I'd expect emotion, the narration seems apathetic. Towards the end of the chapter, when he's at the special facility losing his mind, the tone doesn't seem to reflect it. Though, this could just be a result of the story being a translation?

Chapter 3: The narration becomes more descriptive, probably because the story has actually just kicked off. The scenes are easy to imagine, and I can picture the protagonist's monstrous appearance pretty well in my head (though the image in the end turned out to not be too similar to what I imagined. Honestly, I'd cut out most of these images, they don't add a lot to the story and aren't beautiful or anything).


Overall, I'd say good job. I'll leave it off here for now, but when I do continue I'll probably leave a review under it or something. My one real gripe is that bit of chapter 2 describing the protagonist's time in the secret facility. It should've been given the same amount of description and care as chapter 3 in my opinion. The sort of "deadpan" narrating voice of the protagonist works most times and fits him, but can get tiresome in certain scenes. Again, could be a translation thing, but who knows?

 

[foxes]

Here is the promised feedback:

Thank you. In general, this is an original analysis. The first chapters, of course, need to be revised. As does the entire story. This is my first attempt at writing. However, the analysis I extracted from the neural networks, due to a lack of alternatives, is very different from yours. It is helpful to see how much a person differs from a machine. Her main complaints were about the excessive philosophy and the way the text was presented - exposition. She suggested describing the tavern where the protagonist reminisces, rather than just his thoughts.

The hero is really revealed for his time. But the story is about something else, and it reveals him in a new way. It's a struggle between what is now and what will be later. Essentially, we all go through stages. To do this, we need to describe the start (exposition) and show the transition story.

The character's emotional potential has been exhausted. He was also given sedatives. That's why he's like this. But I don't want to justify myself. It should be emphasized or stirred up. I was aiming for a climax in the third chapter, and that's how it turned out. On the other hand, the lack of emotions in the second chapter provides a contrast for the third.

Technically, the first two chapters should be one for the introduction. It just ended up being too much text, so I split it. So it should be "I was walking and got hit by a truck". But since this is not a rebirth. I thought about a different beginning and became interested.

I was recently trying to create an illustration for this chapter using neural networks. And for the second volume.
As for the difference between how you imagined the main character and how he actually looks. I think it's the difference between hero's fear and reality. At least, that's how I imagine emotions.