Want feedback for my story please reply

[RoboPigeon]

Hey! This is my first time writing a story, so I’d really appreciate any feedback or ideas you think I should add. I’ve got the general plot planned out and already wrote a rough version.

Just wondering if there’s anything important I should keep in mind while writing, or anything else I should be doing to improve it. Thanks!

>Link to the story<

 

[Spoopytagedie]

Aight okay just the title is enough to get my interest. Yeah I gotchu, up for a trade? I started writin again and want some feedback. Either way I gotchu on feedback. How ya want it? Review or here or message

 

[SurfAngel_1031]

Hey! This is my first time writing a story, so I’d really appreciate any feedback or ideas you think I should add. I’ve got the general plot planned out and already wrote a rough version.

Just wondering if there’s anything important I should keep in mind while writing, or anything else I should be doing to improve it. Thanks!

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There's a bunch of threads open that will assist, you should post there.

 

[RoboPigeon]

Aight okay just the title is enough to get my interest. Yeah I gotchu, up for a trade? I started writin again and want some feedback. Either way I gotchu on feedback. How ya want it? Review or here or message

You can message me here. Thank you in advance and sorry for the late reply.

I am a new writer so don't expect much. I'll help give you some feedback but which of yours story do you want me read?

 

[Spoopytagedie]

You can message me here. Thank you in advance and sorry for the late reply.

I am a new writer so don't expect much. I'll help give you some feedback but which of yours story do you want me read?

Ez good. Ill be honest I got a strong bias since I love eldritch horror. I read whats current and I dont have much to say. Its interesting, your descriptions can border poetic in a good way, Albert is a fun character, the world is interesting too. At least to me it really is just an all around good novel and I fully intend to keep reading. Sorry I dont have much to say, i just geniunly like it.

Oh and heres the link for my novel.

Reincarnated As A Wood Golem(Reboot)

Shortly after my son died I started dreaming of another world. I took over a wooden doll and met him, a boy who looked just like my earth son. I could never hear his name despite the nights we spent together. Though, those nights started to grow farther and farther...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[RoboPigeon]

Ez good. Ill be honest I got a strong bias since I love eldritch horror. I read whats current and I dont have much to say. Its interesting, your descriptions can border poetic in a good way, Albert is a fun character, the world is interesting too. At least to me it really is just an all around good novel and I fully intend to keep reading. Sorry I dont have much to say, i just geniunly like it.

Oh and heres the link for my novel.

Reincarnated As A Wood Golem(Reboot)

Shortly after my son died I started dreaming of another world. I took over a wooden doll and met him, a boy who looked just like my earth son. I could never hear his name despite the nights we spent together. Though, those nights started to grow farther and farther...

www.scribblehub.com

*Your synopsis could use less details. Most readers would get confused from the extra details like the lobster and the ruins his son built.
*Also make the synopsis concise, big synopsis usually don't work well.
*Also add a cover picture for your novel.
*I know it is not the genre but adding a bit of humor in between might appeal to broader audience.
*Aside from that your novel is very good, I liked reading it.