Wait, did I really write that?

ThisAdamGuy

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Have you ever had one of those moments where you look back over your own writing and have to do a double take? "Did I write that? The hell is wrong with me?" If so, share it here.

I just had one of those moments right now while writing Siren Called. There is context that makes it make a little more sense, but I think it's funnier without it.

Dylan paused, a strange thought fluttering through his brain almost too quickly for him to catch.

Why am I thinking about buckets so much?

The answer was obvious. He loved buckets. His mother had read him stories about buckets before bed when he'd been little. When he was five, he had begged his father to teach him how to ride a bucket. When River had started stealing all of their attention, an old stuffed bucket had been his only…
 

JayMark

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Have you ever had one of those moments where you look back over your own writing and have to do a double take? "Did I write that? The hell is wrong with me?" If so, share it here.

I just had one of those moments right now while writing Siren Called. There is context that makes it make a little more sense, but I think it's funnier without it.
He must have loved Mr. Bucket.

Mr_Bucket_Milton_Bradley.jpg
 

l8rose

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Not going to post a copy cause I'm too lazy to go grab my external HDD but I have an attempt at writing a story where the main character only spoke in Three Days Grace lyrics. Especially from the song "I Hate Everything About You" and the rest that came out in the early 2000s.

Yup.

I'll leave it at that.
 

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In my first published work, I found three bits where the writing was amazing and three where it was gawdsawful after it went into print. Looking back over my drafts, one of the really good parts and one of the awful parts were there in my first draft. One of the really good parts was created by back-and-forth discussions with my editor, and one was put in at the last minute. The same thing with the horrible parts - one was just hideously convoluted (the one from my first draft), one was actually ruined by back-and-forth discussions and compromises, and the absolute worst one was created by the editor completely rewriting two paragraphs.
Would have to track down my copy in storage and manually type them out (or track down an old 3.5" floppy disk also in storage and a drive that could read it and a word processor I no longer possess - this was from 1988) to find the examples though.
 

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Look, I had a vision, okay? I was taking a walk in the middle of the day when the idea hit me and I felt like Gabriel Garcia Marquez. I just had to turn back and write this shit down. It's for a WIP and I've taken a huge snippet out of it because it just gets more unhinged as it goes on.

My great grandfather, Arnold Hoffman, died in World War II after risking his life jumping on a grenade that never exploded. He was unceremoniously shot through his femoral artery and died hopefully before realizing that what he had shielded his brothers from was, in fact, a fallen canteen—his own canteen.

He was survived by his pregnant wife Nora and young son Alexander who would both go on to immigrate to the US in the early 50s with Nora opening up a hattery. Alexander, my father’s father, took up whaling in Alaska for a short while before it was banned for good. He did make a killing out of the fashion in which he dispatched cetaceans for blubber and oil, but he above all else made a passion out of killing polar bears. He made sure that all mammals, of the sea and of the land, feared him as God.

Losing his father in the war and his mother later in life “turned his brain ass backwards”, as my father put it. Alexander, before he had his only son, killed polar bears not for sport, definitely not for food, and not for self-defense. Rather, he would disembowel his prey and snuggle within the damp abdominal cavity left behind, as it reminded him of his mother.

My father’s mother, which is to say Alexander’s wife, was kept mostly in the dark about his proclivities throughout their marriage until her untimely death at just 37 years old. Alexander too would die when I was a little girl, his request to be buried inside of a polar bear being denied with little deliberation.

Disclaimer: I don't know much about WW2 grenades or Alaskan commercial whaling in the 60s. I haven't done my research yet.
 

AmbreaTaddy

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I've had quite a few of these moments, but it's mostly in my french books, where I am more free in my writing style. Being able to write a novel in a foreign language is already hard... If people succeed in having strong stylistic choices in a foreign language, kuddos to you
 

Tempokai

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Have you ever had one of those moments where you look back over your own writing and have to do a double take? "Did I write that? The hell is wrong with me?" If so, share it here.

I just had one of those moments right now while writing Siren Called. There is context that makes it make a little more sense, but I think it's funnier without it.
Maybe Dylan has Stanley Parable as his isekai'd cousin lol
 

Valmond

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In my first published work, I found three bits where the writing was amazing and three where it was gawdsawful after it went into print. Looking back over my drafts, one of the really good parts and one of the awful parts were there in my first draft. One of the really good parts was created by back-and-forth discussions with my editor, and one was put in at the last minute. The same thing with the horrible parts - one was just hideously convoluted (the one from my first draft), one was actually ruined by back-and-forth discussions and compromises, and the absolute worst one was created by the editor completely rewriting two paragraphs.
Would have to track down my copy in storage and manually type them out (or track down an old 3.5" floppy disk also in storage and a drive that could read it and a word processor I no longer possess - this was from 1988) to find the examples though.
Alright fellas, grab your shovels. We gotta go unearth the past. :blobtaco:
 

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Ah, I think this:

His roommate, the peasant girl he lived with, was not innocent in the sense that she hadn’t taken a few lives herself, but he knew that she was good. Her heart was good. Complicated but good. Done a few things against the code of being morally correct but good.

What was considered ’morally correct’, and who decided to punish those who weren’t?
 
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