This is not a story about a cute heroine who always makes the right choices.

[K_Nishi]

This is not a story about a cute heroine who always makes the right choices.

If you enjoy morally ambiguous female protagonists and stories that don’t follow familiar templates, this might be for you.

If you end up enjoying it, I’d really appreciate hearing your thoughts in the comments.

Season 2 begins on February 3rd.


――Buried alive by her father, seventeen-year-old Maya claws back from the grave—reborn as a Returner.

A cult took her childhood. A state built on fear wants her erased.

HELL’S RETURNERS

Buried alive by her father, seventeen-year-old Maya claws back from the grave—reborn as a Returner. A cult took her childhood. A state built on fear wants her erased. In a near-future dystopia of corruption and human experimentation, she survives by joining Luna Nordics—a covert family of...

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[L1aei]

Read your first chapter. Um... okay. I'm going to sound hostile, but there is no bite intended. This is just to jar your imagination in another direction. That does not mean it is the correct direction, just something for you think over and I want you to be angry about it. Get those juices pumping so you are in a similar emotional state like Maya, I would believe, be in, okay.

So, Maya, she is rather rational after exhuming herself, don't you think? I know I have misfires going off in my head when I'm on a binger, and that's without the suffocation and desperation of escaping a coffin. I mean, like, did we miss where she sat down for some tea first before composing herself to make plans?

 

[K_Nishi]

Read your first chapter. Um... okay. I'm going to sound hostile, but there is no bite intended. This is just to jar your imagination in another direction. That does not mean it is the correct direction, just something for you think over and I want you to be angry about it. Get those juices pumping so you are in a similar emotional state like Maya, I would believe, be in, okay.

So, Maya, she is rather rational after exhuming herself, don't you think? I know I have misfires going off in my head when I'm on a binger, and that's without the suffocation and desperation of escaping a coffin. I mean, like, did we miss where she sat down for some tea first before composing herself to make plans?

Thanks for taking the time to read it and for the honest reaction.

I see what you mean about Maya seeming too rational after something like that. The contrast was intentional, but I agree that it can feel unnatural when you think about the physical and mental shock she just went through.

I’ll definitely think more about how much chaos and disorientation should bleed through in those early moments.

I appreciate you trying to shake things up rather than just saying “this works” or “this doesn’t.”