The Deurtagonist of my story is extremely Overpowered, but suffers from narcolepsy and lets the Protagonist almost die several times

[MR.Squabbles]

I just wanted to hear your thoughts on this concept. As I thought it was pretty funny and original I think?

 

[Jerynboe]

It sounds like it would get old very quickly but One Punch Man is extremely popular with an equally deliberately bad premise as its core joke. So it’s all about execution. So, are you a writing chad on par with ONE? If so, or you are willing to try to be, go for it.

 

[AnEmberOfSundown]

Long form it could get very difficult to keep that interesting unless you’ve got some interesting twists already up your sleeve. If you do, I can see how it could be interesting. Just be wary that you’re also using a real world medical condition as story fodder.
Not saying don’t do it, but hopefully read up on it first.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

In the early chapters (she got better later ... and the enemies got more intelligent... and then it moved off to their kids being the focus) of a webnovel my wife was listening to ("Saving Nora"), the MC suffered from this. Often slept for days or weeks after a mission. It was the only thing that kept her from Kryptonian power levels at times it seemed.

 

[FRWriter]

Sounds like one of those annoying anime concepts, like Sanji getting a life-threatening nose-bleed, Zoro getting lost, and Luffy just being all around stupid.
If this is a comedic story, go for it; if you want a serious, grounded story, people will get annoyed and drop it.

 

[ZannaYO]

Actually, I have narcolepsy. Cataplexy is what it's called when you have a "sleep attack" and slump over. The name is somewhat of a misnomer, because you don't fall asleep exactly. You might slip into REM and hallucinate, but otherwise it's more that muscles go limp and you flop over. It takes a little while to get your bearings back. Also, cataplexy isn't usually random, but brought on by strong emotions (this is why narcoleptics are known to have sleep attacks in the middle of laughing).

I know you didn't ask for this kind of feedback, but thought it might be helpful? The snoring part had me confused, and thinking you might be misunderstanding what cataplexy usually entails. Happy writing!

PS: Your art is really good btw!!