Story feedback

[Little--Tiger]

It's my 1st time attempting any novel. Honestly I am more interested in writing this as a webcomic/manga but because of the lack of my skill in drawing I decided to put it on internet in novel form for now untill I reach a minimum level in drawing.
Any honestly feedback appreciated.


https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2255951/thunder-of-meluha/