Reviewing

[Nekouni]

This is my latest series, and I want to know what can others understand from only 2 chapters as well what can I change.

The Enigmatic Knight

Aris becomes the leader of her village's defense force after her brother leaves the position to become a knight in the capital city, where he excels in his duties as a protector. Despite Aris's desire to continue guarding her village, deep in her heart, she harbors a longing to become...

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[MintiLime]

Cool! I’ll check it out :)
Just read the chapters and commented :) It’s good so far.

I got the sense that

1.Aris is strong and thoughtful, has swordsmanship and magic but does not want to use the latter

2. Her brother is regretful and may have been pressured as the eldest son

3. The mom knows her children but did not seem to help out with protecting the village or discussing their stressors

4. No sign of dad- either dead or waiting to pop up as a villain. Maybe he’s the origin of Aris’s magic?

5. Diana is strong and like Aris. Does not seem to be jealous or resentful, but does know about the magic. At risk for being kidnapped by bandits for plot purposes

I don’t think anything really needs changed. The brother’s letter read a little strangely but as a newbie author, been there done that. Sometimes you just can’t get around it when you want to convey information. Other than that, I think the story just needs time to progress further!