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[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Fingers crossed this is the final form of chapter 5. By this point I'm getting sick of the transformations too.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

My bad correction again

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

This should be the definitive version. Sincere apologies

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Greetings, a major retooling effort. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Ok chapter 7 is done and dusted. Somehow, after the nips and tucks it grew in size.

Son of the Sun - Chapter 7 – What goes bump in the night | Scribble Hub

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PS: Thoughts, critique all is very much appreciated.

 

[Tempokai]

To be fair, it's readable. For a chapter that has a lot going on, it's completely fine. Sure, the content almost the same, but the context got improved. I'd say 85% done because I saw few floating " in the text. Check the formatting again, and it will be good to go for now.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

To be fair, it's readable. For a chapter that has a lot going on, it's completely fine. Sure, the content almost the same, but the context got improved. I'd say 85% done because I saw few floating " in the text. Check the formatting again, and it will be good to go for now.

Cheers I’ll look into it. Word just isn’t the best at catching small errors. I’ll go over it again.

PS: Much obliged.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Greetings, here's chapter 8. Have been under the weather of and on so some typos etc might have crept in.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

Chapter 8 is done and dusted. Hip-hip. Thoughts, critique is very welcome.

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