Prologue draft feedback

[Deleted member 93348]

So far, this prologue’s pretty long, but I do wish to omit some paragraphs and plotlines. After a few beta readers (including my sister, an avid reader of fantasy), all concluded the prose was easy to follow. So please let me know what you think.

World Story 2.0 draft

P.S. Italicized words on this prologue will be block quotes once published, so bare with me.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Yes, the prose is better.

 

[Zirrboy]

Sailus™ approved