Wedge
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Hi.
I’ve been writing a web novel for a while now. I don’t want to publish it until I’ve built up a decent stockpile of chapters, but I’m curious to see if anyone would be interested in it at all.
That’s why I thought I’d post the prologue here for feedback. It’s about 4,500 words.
docs.google.com
Generally speaking, the concept is quite ambitious. I have an idea for a complex and rather innovative world, but I also want to keep a few things that web novel readers like (power systems, progression, quest portal) and one thing I know most people hate, but I think it suits my style very well – writing this way (multiple POVs – exactly 5, which you can see in the prologue; I’ll try to make sure there aren’t any more).
I’m curious to hear your opinions, though not on everything. This isn’t the final version; it’ll still undergo revisions, so any typos or punctuation aren’t important. I’m interested in whether you like my style, the vibe of the world, and whether I’m overdoing it with neologisms (I know I am and I’ll probably ignore your opinions because that’s what excites me most about writing, but try to convince me otherwise). I think I managed to avoid that in the prologue, but I know I have a problem with infodumps, so you can point that out. That sort of thing. Criticise, but keep it constructive.
I should also mention that I’m not writing this in English originally; it’s a translation from my native language (it’s just easier for me that way), with the help of a translator. I’m aware that a few things have gone wrong as a result, and I’ll try to fix them in the official release, but please keep an eye out to see if I’ve missed anything in the corrections.
Also, this is my first serious attempt at writing anything (so I’m throwing myself straight into a complex, multi-plot novel – why not?), I used to write fanfiction, but I got bored of it quickly, so that doesn’t count.
That’s all. Enjoy.
I’ve been writing a web novel for a while now. I don’t want to publish it until I’ve built up a decent stockpile of chapters, but I’m curious to see if anyone would be interested in it at all.
That’s why I thought I’d post the prologue here for feedback. It’s about 4,500 words.
Tír na nÓg.docx
Prologue – Tír na nÓg Maralat had visited the Threshold many times before: the largest and, above all, the most populous of the districts of Tír na nÓg. It was a good place for the practice of an Apocalypse like him. He had never appeared there on the day of the Occurrence, however. Even he was ...
docs.google.com
Generally speaking, the concept is quite ambitious. I have an idea for a complex and rather innovative world, but I also want to keep a few things that web novel readers like (power systems, progression, quest portal) and one thing I know most people hate, but I think it suits my style very well – writing this way (multiple POVs – exactly 5, which you can see in the prologue; I’ll try to make sure there aren’t any more).
I’m curious to hear your opinions, though not on everything. This isn’t the final version; it’ll still undergo revisions, so any typos or punctuation aren’t important. I’m interested in whether you like my style, the vibe of the world, and whether I’m overdoing it with neologisms (I know I am and I’ll probably ignore your opinions because that’s what excites me most about writing, but try to convince me otherwise). I think I managed to avoid that in the prologue, but I know I have a problem with infodumps, so you can point that out. That sort of thing. Criticise, but keep it constructive.
I should also mention that I’m not writing this in English originally; it’s a translation from my native language (it’s just easier for me that way), with the help of a translator. I’m aware that a few things have gone wrong as a result, and I’ll try to fix them in the official release, but please keep an eye out to see if I’ve missed anything in the corrections.
Also, this is my first serious attempt at writing anything (so I’m throwing myself straight into a complex, multi-plot novel – why not?), I used to write fanfiction, but I got bored of it quickly, so that doesn’t count.
That’s all. Enjoy.
