Please check out 7 Entities - Fantasy, Psychological, Space.

[BrokenShuriken]

Can you guys please check out my novel '7 Entities' and tell me what you feel about it. You can be honest and say "it's trash" if its bad i don't mind.

 

[McPhoenixDavid]

I think it is not nice to post the same thing on multiple sections of the forum.

It looks like spamming. I don't mind but others might. Anyways, about that work: I have one thing to say:

PARAGRAPH SPACING!!!

 

[TASTYLEADPAINT]

1 major piece of feed back is paragraph spacing or just using paragraphs at all

Reading your 1st actual chapter feelslikeimreadingsomethingwrittenlikethis youneedtoput spaces betweeen your paragraphs.

If your struggling to know when to use them creating a new paragraph when you change the subject or when another character is speaking is a place to start.

 

[BrokenShuriken]

1 major piece of feed back is paragraph spacing or just using paragraphs at all

Reading your 1st actual chapter feelslikeimreadingsomethingwrittenlikethis youneedtoput spaces betweeen your paragraphs.

If your struggling to know when to use them creating a new paragraph when you change the subject or when another character is speaking is a place to start.

Thanksss for the advice. I fixed it So I'd be happy if you are willing to give it one more try.