New chapter out!!! looking for feedback

Horrible-Void

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Wrote my first chapter and I am trying to get anyone to read it lol

It's a small town drama horror about two siblings who have a unstable relationship with each other that gets put to the test when they get entangled in a series of murders in their home town. On top of dealing with the trauma that comes with such a thing, they will also have to deal with a suspicious cop that always seems to be around the corner and a weird boy a school watching from the distance.
Can these sibling fix their relationship and solve the murders?

I wanted something simple for my first story

 

MintiLime

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Cool! I’m in a similar position as a new author. I’ll read through and let you know what I think!

Annoying self-insert for feedback:
 

MintiLime

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I just read it! I thought it was really good. More updates will probably attract more readers over time :) I know you gained one in me ;)
 
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