This fellow Daoist is requesting feedback on his work. I'm sure that I got some areas to improve since I still haven't consolidated my foundation and my Dao heart needs polishing. These suggestions can be on anything such as characters, interactions between them, world-building, the story going to slowly, too fast, too much or little detail, less dialogue, not enough face-slapping. Any help is appreciated and will reap you karmic virtue.
How do I link this?
How do I link this?