My first light novel

[GiantFrog]

Please have a look , I would love to have advice , suggestion & review . https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1853268/ashes-of-the-first-life/

 

[Hoshino]

I would recommend organizing your chapters.

 

[GiantFrog]

I would recommend organizing your chapters.

Thank you. I have reorganised them