Hi.
I'm no expert.
But here's my feedback.
I'll just say one.
When I read your Synopsis is one thing that cross my mind.
What's so interesting about Wolfgang's Insomnia?
Cos I don't catch anything interesting about it.
The 3 months period, Tanuki, and the program don't awake my interest that much.
It's like saying:
People is eating spaghetti with sauce and garlic.
There's nothing interesting about that.
But when
People is eating a live snake and the snake strikes back, causing commotion and blood everywhere.
That' could be more interesting.
Maybe if the insomnia were caused by him seeing the end of the world each night. And the signs get clearer, but people don't believe him and he determines to stop the apocalypse. Even though everyone thought he's crazy.
That could be more interesting.
I think the key to make things interesting is by breaking the normal pattern.
Like eating spaghetti with sauce and garlic, that's normal.
But eating a live snake and it fights back, and blood everywhere, that's not a normal event. We don't see that daily, and we don't get used to.
