Looking for feedback

[Phantonym]

Hi! I just posted my first chapter of my first novel and I would appreciate it if I got some feedback on it. Thanks in advance!
My novel is in my signature, it only has the prologue so far.

 

[Phantonym]

The God’s Successor - Prologue – An Unruly God | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

This is my novel, might still be pending

 

[Corty]

Ah, this is a double-posted thread.

 

[Phantonym]

The other one was posted when the novel hadn't made it through moderation

Ah, this is a double-posted thread.

 

[Daydreamers]

The God’s Successor - Prologue – An Unruly God | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

This is my novel, might still be pending

I was confused at the start, btw is this the same one from the inspiration post ,with the neko part

 

[Phantonym]

I was confused at the start, btw is this the same one from the inspiration post ,with the neko part

This one won't have the neko part

 

[Daydreamers]

This one won't have the neko part

I see , well happy writing

 

[Phantonym]

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[Xierte]

My English knowledge is lacking, but I will try to read.

 

[Phantonym]

My English knowledge is lacking, but I will try to read.

Thanks!