Looking for feedback/review for my novel

NanoBuns

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Hello everyone, first time making a post on my own.

First things first, I'm pretty much a fledgling when it comes to being a novel writer. I've been writing for fun before, but this project that I'm publishing is my first attempt at having my work published. I'm also not a native English speaker, but I've been using the language for a long time now.

So I've been writing this project as a hobby, creating a story and lore for my OC, the girl on the cover. She initially existed as a character I made in a 3D character customization game, before I eventually spent an unhealthy amount of my paycheck on getting artworks done of her. Eventually, down the line, I decided that just having artwork of her wasn't enough, and I've always been a sucker for the tactical and gun-related media (John Wick, Rainbow Six Siege, etc.), and thus, this work came to life.

I'm currently only writing this novel as a passion project, something to do while I'm free at work, so my upload schedule is only 1 chapter a week on Monday for now, at least until I have enough backlog chapters to potentially upload 2 or 3 per week.

I'm hoping that anyone who would be kind enough to give it a read and give me some feedback, or leave a review if you have the time. Anything would be appreciated, as long as it is constructive and not just pointless slander or just a comment saying it's good enough.


Blurb:

The world was no longer the same, not after being crippled and devastated by the calamity that was the Third World War. Million deaths, both military and civilian. Countless families were left broken and displaced. Towns were laid to waste, ravaged by bombs and artillery. Multiple cities were wiped off the world’s map by bioengineered weapons and nuclear bombs. Nations weakened, broken, divided. Old empires collapsed, and new ones were born and baptised by the ashes of war.

In the wake of the war, international criminal organizations formed, pirate groups powerful enough to control entire regions of the ocean and terrorize even naval forces, and corporations and secret societies took advantage of the fragile new world to further their ambitions.

To combat the new world’s threats, various Private Military Companies formed all around the globe, offering their services to any nation with enough capital but not enough military power to deal with the plethora of threats. This gave rise to the new age of PMC and Mercenaries.

My Phan, birthed by a human-trafficked mother, raised in captivity, and later rescued by a PMC, but not before witnessing her mother’s death. Adopted by the man who rescued her.

My was raised and guided to be a PMC soldier when she became of age. As she stepped into the world of mercenaries, she must become strong and fierce enough to overcome countless threats to the new and fragile peace, to uphold her own sense of justice, and to exact vengeance against the higher forces that have caused so much suffering to her before.

Follow My (Maple) Phan as she battles against criminal syndicates, pirate overlords, corporate tyrannies, and monsters lurking within secret societies all around the world.

What to expect:

  • Tactical Squad Action and Gun-fu
  • Detailed actions and description
  • Seeming Happy-go-lucky female main character with a tragic past and a slightly psychotic side
  • World-building on alternate history events that mirror the real world
  • Occasional adult-oriented chapters contain gore, smut, and/or disturbing topics. It's an adult-oriented novel.
 
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