Looking for feedback on a short completed dark fantasy (4 chapters / ~2k words)

[K_Nishi]

Hi! I recently finished a short dark-fantasy story:
“Leo, the Archmage of Blazing Flames” (COMPLETED)


It’s a quick read with psychological elements — a hero whose overwhelming power hides a fragile identity.


I would love to receive any thoughts — pacing, themes, character empathy, or anything that stood out to you.
Thank you so much!
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1951876/leo-the-archmage-of-blazing-flamescompleted/

 

[K_Nishi]

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