I'll evaluate new writers!

[Rocco_Pelano]

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I am not requiring anything.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I G not requiring anything.

How do you define "new" in the context of this thread?
And are there any genres/tags that you are either looking for or looking to avoid?

 

[OscarTlau]

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I am not requiring anything.

Here is mine(hope you like it): https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1215877/the-chronicles-of-the-scarlet-king/

 

[RaizellV]

I guess I'll put mine as well: A song For The Ages | Scribble Hub

 

[erintesden]

Could you tell me what you think of my story: Valiant Phantasm
It's just first chapter by now.

 

[Rocco_Pelano]

How do you define "new" in the context of this thread?
And are there any genres/tags that you are either looking for or looking to avoid?

Nah, and I just mean new like new to writing. Just starting out at publishing or posting writing. You may have written before, but there is a ton to learn after publishing and posting and what not.

 

[StoneInky]

Eh, I'm still in the middle of editing after feedback from Deepseek and Reurent, but I don't mind another opinion.
Warning: It's dark BL. No mature chapters yet.

Best Friend Obsession

Do you know the best friend of the male lead in Boys Love novels? The second male lead who tries to help the protagonist escape, only to watch as he falls into the obsessive male lead’s clutches. If my life were such a novel, that would be me. And...

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[CharlesEBrown]

Nah, and I just mean new like new to writing. Just starting out at publishing or posting writing. You may have written before, but there is a ton to learn after publishing and posting and what not.

Well, I probably don't QUITE count (having been writing since I first learned what an alphabet was at age five... though have yet to publish anything formally outside of role-playing game modules... oh, and one very short story in our college literary magazine in the late 80s...) but if you want to take a look at any one or more of the stories I've posted here (in my signature or on my profile) feel free. If not, well, there are a lot of new(er) writers to pick from so no big deal!

 

[JMCfor]

Well this is mine, please let me know.
It is called. I Became Universal Will.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1473576/i-became-universal-will/

 

[LesserCodex]

What do you consider a new writer?

 

[StoneInky]

Well this is mine, please let me know.
It is called. I Became Universal Will.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1473576/i-became-universal-will/

I've seen your work. Break up your bigger paragraphs, especially the ones with dialogue. There's a reason why authors usually give dialogue their own paragraph—it looks better and less intimidating for readers.

 

[JMCfor]

I've seen your work. Break up your bigger paragraphs, especially the ones with dialogue. There's a reason why authors usually give dialogue their own paragraph—it looks better and less intimidating for readers.

Thanks for the feedback, I would correct that.

 

[Author.eren]

Here, I'll be waiting for feedback
The sovereign Ascendant

The Sovereign Ascendant

Eren stood at the peak of human achievement—richer than empires, stronger than nations, and feared by all. A man who conquered the world through sheer will, intelligence, and unrelenting ambition. Yet, in the end, his reward was nothing but emptiness. When he chose to leave that life behind...

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[Danja]

Links to my stories are in my signature ??

 

[StoneInky]

I guess I'll put mine as well: A song For The Ages | Scribble Hub

I'm reading the story, and I like it. But you should tighten Chapter one a bit; it was a tad draggy for me. In the later chapters it's less noticeable.

And this is a personal thing, lmao, but the childhood bit is boring me. Especially the mom. She feels like the generic nice parent. I hope there's something more interesting at play with the parents, and they're not just stereotypes. :)


Edited:

I kept reading. The story is very fun, but you have issues in story flow that I have to squint my eyes to ignore.

The main problem is that you have too much dramatic dialogue. It feels repetitive. Not every moment or conversation needs to be dramatic, especially ones between close family, and I trust you know which parts I'm talking about; reread it yourself, and you'll recognize that some sentences or paragraphs feel unnatural or cringey. The solution would be to either delete them, or change some of it to feel less heavy.

I suggest just deleting them. For example, you could do away with Chapter 5 entirely- it's just an infodump about the setting, and readers will skip past it. Same with an earlier chapter, where the MC first says Mommy and Daddy. It was repetitive, generic, and added very little to the story, so I skimmed past it. It didn't gimme any plot, any character progression, and it didn't even have humor, it was just unnecessarily dramatic. It made me wonder why you even added it.

To talk about the more positive sides, this was one of the better novels I've seen asking for reviews. I like the mix of xianxia and fantasy, and the MC was very likeable. And the prose were very vivid, abeit slow paced. Keep up the good work! :)

 

[PandaKen07]

The Ascendants: Early Years

In the peaceful town of Ozamian, young Artreus dreams of becoming the strongest knight, inspired by his older brother, Arthur Reigns. But his life is shattered when the Demon King Abaddon attacks their town, killing his mother and leaving a trail of devastation. Determined to seek justice and...

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I hope you'll like it, please leave it a review or comments.
Thank you!

 

[sumichan]

Hey there, hope you'll have time to check my work! Endemic Love

 

[knightessDragontle]

The Lost Princess’ Descendant: The First Bloom

Book 1: The First Bloom *** This is a raw release of a completed book. It's part of a fast-evolving series that I'm writing with momentum and passion. While the final polished version will come after the series is complete, the full story is here and ready for you to dive into....

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I’ll put mines here. My beginning chapters are slow and long. The female lead will appear later in the story :)

 

[Danielbanda]

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I am not requiring anything.

Here is mine

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I am not requiring anything.

Check out this one;

RYOJIN KUROHANE; THE ABYSSAL MONARCH

Ryojin Kurohane was once a powerful warrior, drawing strength from the mysterious Nexus Abyss—the place where the realms of mortals, demons, spirits, and gods collide. But betrayal came from the one he trusted most. Branded a threat, the Celestial Order cast him into the Abyss—a void so...

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[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

Let me know what you think?

The Succubus and The Maverick [LitRPG]

5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma and no one knows why. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's parents...

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