Editing I need feedback

[HellShadow1]

Hey forum members, I am writing a new novel called "Choosen by Goddess Hela, I became silent death", I need some feedback from you, already experienced authors. What should I improve.

Choosen by Goddess Hela, I became the Silent Death.

Ash Rivenhart is the third son of the Rivenhart family. He has no affinity with magic, nor can he handle swordsmanship. Seeing him as pathetic and good for nothing, his brothers bully him and throw him into the forest as a prank. Who knew that prank would come back to...

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[Dec]

You could improve by adding a link to said novel in your post, so people can easily find it.

 

[HellShadow1]

You could improve by adding a link to said novel in your post, so people can easily find it.

Done, I have added the link

 

[OokamiKasumi]

If this is what you are looking for?

Get yourself some Beta-Readers, and Ask Them point-blank --with a List-- what you want them to check for improvements. Be Specific.

Reference:

Editing [Tutorial] Test Your Story's Popularity Potential -- Beta-Readers​

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