I took a quick look.
Mind you, I'm not trying to be mean, or rude, but I am dyslexic, so punctuation, and grammar are some things I, personally, generally, look for, and you're missing... a lot of it; Not saying you need to be perfect at it, or need to go edit everything if you don't want to, but with the way you naturally write, commas will be your friend.
That said, (putting punctuation, and grammar aside.)
This is your synopsis:
You don't really have to be a magus anymore. Sure, if you're born into a magical lineage you'll have to learn the secrets and then pass them onto your own offspring or maybe inscribe them into the neurons of a bullfrog somewhere, but you don't actually have to practice. There is just no reason to get yourself involved in that nonsense. You wanna protect Humanity? Pursue knowledge? The ladies and gentlemen of the Associations have that covered. Just relax.
But, despite this fact, these "prodigal sons" eventually find their way back to magic after coming face-to-face with the reality of everyday life for years and years on end. The keyword is eventually.
Filia Tertias, at the age of 18 years, 3 months, 4 days, and about half an hour, felt he'd had more than enough of the world of Humanity and seen all its fathoms, and so, leapt headfirst into the second (possibly third) most terrible of the terrible businesses of magic, hunting. Quickly outcast, he finds himself at the center of an agency of other rejected hunters, and suffers the cost of trying to make a living, and his own hubris...
Question:
Is it called "
The Association", or are you leaving the name of the association vague?
I noticed the first paragraph reads more like an announcement; A paperboy, or someone on the street shouting at people, '
hear ye, hear ye'.
I would say, remove the "Just relax." at the end. Everything else is great. The "just relax" is more of an eyeroll,
as it should be, but you're trying to bring people in to read your book,
not deter them.
The second paragraph jumps into... 'Author mode''(??) describing the, seemingly, fact(?) that these people who delved themselves into magic, left magic behind for a regular life, but ultimately ran back(???).
Why did they leave in the first place? Also.. If they don't need to practice, what are they running back to? This line doesn't really make much sense to me.
The third is very...
sloggish -compared to the first. I know it's supposed to be comedic in some way, but doesn't read as such (at least, not for me). I also recognize it's where your story description begins... so you can't delete it entirely.
I would (which you don't have to if you don't want to) write it as such:
Filia Tertias had more than enough! The world society had created had become dull, predictable, and boring. He'd seen everything it could possibly fathom from the perch of his all mighty ego, and at the cost of his own hubris, he'd decided to leap, headlong, into the business of Hunting; A business so dreadful, it was deemed as: 'The most disgraceful use of magic that could have ever been imagined'.
Keep the 1st. and explain the awkwardness of the 2nd, or delete it.
The first paragraph was eye catching on it own.
...and the cover is.. -
memorable.. though, I don't think for good reason. lol
Either way, good job so far.
