I don't know if I know how to write a story or not

[Boundless]

Yeah, you read that right. Sometimes, I always thought that my plot was well-structured, but everytime I read it, it feels like it lack emotions. I wrote this second story of mine, revised all of it for the sake of feeling its emotions. But no matter how I do it, it feels like it is lacking something.

How do you deal with that dilemma? Especially I like writing in omniscient pov, it feels like I'm not doing it right. Help me and thank you

 

[Cannight]

I don't. I know I don't know how to write a story, but I still do

 

[Rookieqw]

Yeah, you read that right. Sometimes, I always thought that my plot was well-structured, but everytime I read it, it feels like it lack emotions. I wrote this second story of mine, revised all of it for the sake of feeling its emotions. But no matter how I do it, it feels like it is lacking something.

How do you deal with that dilemma? Especially I like writing in omniscient pov, it feels like I'm not doing it right. Help me and thank you

Based on your previous work, you're doing just fine. Give it a try; you can always stop and delete it if people won't like it.

 

[Boundless]

Based on your previous work, you're doing just fine. Give it a try; you can always stop and delete it if people won't like it.

but I really like that story. It's been my dream to write that plot since 2018. Maybe the flow is at fault

 

[miyoga]

One thing that I might suggest is to simply put yourself into your character's headspace as you write their dialogue or map out their actions. Ask questions like "is this something that [character name] would do" or "if I were this person, what would my actions/thoughts/feelings be" and then try to translate that into what you're writing. Just because you're writing omniscient doesn't mean you can't or shouldn't jump into your characters. My MC for my first short story was a literal rock, and I still asked those same questions to add some level of relatability for readers.

My only other advice would be to have a proof reader, as in "searching for proof that emotions do exist". If they can feel the emotions and they fit, great! If they can't feel them or they don't fit right, then you can think about ways to change the scene.

 

[Nolff]

Yeah, you read that right. Sometimes, I always thought that my plot was well-structured, but everytime I read it, it feels like it lack emotions. I wrote this second story of mine, revised all of it for the sake of feeling its emotions. But no matter how I do it, it feels like it is lacking something.

How do you deal with that dilemma? Especially I like writing in omniscient pov, it feels like I'm not doing it right. Help me and thank you

You've imagined the scenes of your chars' dialogues, right? Then, consider imagining them talking to each other or when they're doing stuff.

Take a look at one of mine here.

"Hhh... I need to stay strong." *Nose perks up*
"A-ah! Kirishima-san, here's some tissue."
"Thank you so much, Izu- ACHOO!"

Izuku and Kirishima stand before the dome's entrance, waiting for their teachers. The Sturdy Hero catches a cold, and the blizzard seems to be the source of it.
As the teachers arrive, Deku can faintly see something moving.

"What... Is that?"

Kirishima, who was cold, followed his gaze. There's nothing visible, for a moment. But then, motions start to get noticed.
"Kirishima, is there anything wrong?" Aizawa asked. Silent answered him instead. The only thing the teachers can do is look to their right and see a figure moving away from a green trash can. They're barely able to be recognized, yet the figure seems like someone they knew...

"Alf!"
Deku screams the figure's name, but they don't react to him, as if the blizzard whirls away his voice. He gets up and sprints towards the figure, entering the dome. Aizawa tries to pull him back but to no avail, swearing is the only thing he can do as he sees one of his students disappear behind the door, slowly closing, obstructing his view.

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(Izuku's POV)


Where am I?

Ah yes, Kirishima's sneezing with green ooze on his nose.

Re-reading this part kept reminding me of how this scenario goes. Deku standing beside Kirishima handing him a tissue, the teachers arrive to see what their students have found, and Aizawa curses about one of his students' idiocracy.
Mind you, Deku is an emotionally developed character. I aim these chaps for MHA geeks, crossovers' nerds, and fanfics enjoyers.