Sorry, but the story seems to have nothing new to offer. Reincarnating more than once has been done many times before -- at least you can add more twists to the gimmick. The premise is also cliched. The first chapter, however, is alright.
Aight I took your suggestions in account and edited the synopsis and the name. (Heck this even ended up making me rewrite tons of shit) And im proud of it all... Except for the title in which I give up. (As none of them fit my story) Anyways thanks alot.
At first glance, the story seems like a generic isekai until I read the first chapter. The narration is unique for sure, but I personally don't think it'll work with the premise. This kind of narrative voice is better suited for multiple protagonists, but that doesn't mean you should stop doing it. Maybe you can prove me wrong, who knows.I'm feeling a bit masochistic today, so do mine please!
RE: All From His Seat
They say Krodoa is very much alive. 'That' planet of magic, home to countless races and supernatural phenomenon. This very world is set to undergo an enormous change as Michael, a human from Earth, is reincarnated into the body of a baby.www.scribblehub.com
I'll take it! That's already a better review than my first story lmao
Now your goal is to be more than 100 readers by chapter 30 and come back and say you beat his prediction lol ?
I failed the first time, second time is definitely not a charm lmao
Improvement each time is good.
Well, you got me curious with that title. Even though the premise (arguably) is overdone, the story is promising just because of the MC's unusual ability. Most importantly, it reeks of overpoweredness which is great for readership.what about mine? I really want someone to give feedbacks on my novel because it's my first-time on doing actual webnovel (the other one is just for fun)
The Power-Shifting Ability is Convenient Even in Another World
Shin Soru and a beautiful girl named Mitsuha Reika were getting tired of this tedious world. While standing on the rooftop and watching the city below them, Reika accidentally fell from the rooftop and accidentally pulled Soru along! Suddenly, a pillar of light hit both of them, saving them from...
Ohhh! I expect more criticism but this makes me more determined to continue!
I meant the part where getting isekai'ed due to the goddess's summon. Maybe overdone isn't the right word, just have been done many times.
Oh, well I couldn't think of anything, though. I want to introduce the villain at the early stage so that the revenge trope would be executed HAHAHAAH. but there's nothing I could do
Lol I guess you could say that except I don't use cards, crystal balls, or whatever.
I see. Is nice to see/hear objective response after my two-year break in writing. Alright then, I probably should edit some things in the synopsis. Been years since I edited it. Thanks! Appreciate this lots
