I’m not sure what to choose

[Deleted member 45782]

The Vaha Empire invaded Earth. For a thousand years, Earth was under their rule. But one day, a strange phenomenon happened that changed the whole universe: the appearance of Magic, and the introduction of the Celestia system. How did the humans use the new power to take their independence back? What did they do after gaining it?

Made it more consistent and adjusted it a bit.

Kinda reminds me of some random sentence story made to join a writer discord server lol. Aliens came and took over. Pockets of human resistance rediscovered magic (thought it was all elves and fairytales). Will it help them win or will it be something that goes beyond their control? Or something like that.

 

[Nhatduongg]

Made it more consistent and adjusted it a bit.

Kinda reminds me of some random sentence story made to join a writer discord server lol. Aliens came and took over. Pockets of human resistance rediscovered magic (thought it was all elves and fairytales). Will it help them win or will it be something that goes beyond their control? Or something like that.

So this is also a no?

 

[Deleted member 45782]

So this is also a no?

Nothing, might be the final remake:
The Vaha Empire came to invade Earth.
For a thousand years, they put Earth under their rule.
But one day, a strange phenomenon happened and changed the whole universe: the appearance of Magic, and the introduction of the Celestia system.
How did the humans use the new power to take their independence back? What did they do after gaining it?

Your story sounds interesting. But your synopsis didn't pull me in. Its more of the background of the story but there's not enough to it. Most times, I've read synopses that at least mention the protagonist's or maybe the story based from the protagonist's point, and a vague but not too vague idea of what the story or conflict is leading up to. Though this could work, but its not very interesting.

 

[Nhatduongg]

Your story sounds interesting. But your synopsis didn't pull me in. Its more of the background of the story but there's not enough to it. Most times, I've read synopses that at least mention the protagonist's or maybe the story based from the protagonist's point, and a vague but not too vague idea of what the story or conflict is leading up to. Though this could work, but its not very interesting.

With that I’m dead stuck, writing the synopsis is harder than the story itself. If only you could give me an idea (sorry if I end up ctrl C ctrl V it).

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Magic used to only exist in the higher realms and, by a god’s mistake, had appeared down the Overworld. The sudden increase in Mana particles has resulted in disasters across the universe. Now that the Mana has become stable, almost every life in the Overworld had been granted the ability to use magic.
This is a story about a lazy person. First, he is known for being a genius scientist, then an Arena Breaker, then a friend of the Supreme Leader, then… The more things people discovered about him, the more of a mystery he became. Now they wondered why a person like him stayed hidden. Those who wondered was one of the few people that knew a fraction of his truth.
Yet, that person was very simple. Ignore what people knew and what they wanted to know. His only desire was to sleep through the day. He will use everything he has to secure a good sleep time without being bothered.

Not the best but...

Magic used to only exist in the higher realms until a mistake by one of the gods led it to appear in the Overworld. The sudden increase in Mana particles initially resulted in numerous disasters across the universe, but over time, the Mana became stabilized, with with every lifeform in the Overworld becoming dependent on it.​

That's about it. Hard to write more. You gave a character profile. Not about how first paragraph related to what conflict the character will become involved with.

The Vaha Empire invaded Earth. For a thousand years, Earth was under their rule. But one day, a strange phenomenon happened that changed the whole universe: the appearance of Magic, and the introduction of the Celestia system. How did the humans use the new power to take their independence back? What did they do after gaining it?​

Sounds like two very different story plots. Really depends on what you choose. Since I don't know much of your story go off on. That, and gotta call it a night.

 

[Nhatduongg]

Magic used to only exist in the higher realms and, by a god’s mistake, had appeared down the Overworld. The sudden increase in Mana particles has resulted in disasters across the universe. Now that the Mana has become stable, almost every life in the Overworld had been granted the ability to use magic.
This is a story about a lazy person. First, he is known for being a genius scientist, then an Arena Breaker, then a friend of the Supreme Leader, then… The more things people discovered about him, the more of a mystery he became. Now they wondered why a person like him stayed hidden. Those who wondered was one of the few people that knew a fraction of his truth.
Yet, that person was very simple. Ignore what people knew and what they wanted to know. His only desire was to sleep through the day. He will use everything he has to secure a good sleep time without being bothered.

Not the best but...

Magic used to only exist in the higher realms until a mistake by one of the gods led it to appear in the Overworld. The sudden increase in Mana particles initially resulted in numerous disasters across the universe, but over time, the Mana became stabilized, with with every lifeform in the Overworld becoming dependent on it.​

That's about it. Hard to write more. You gave a character profile. Not about how first paragraph related to what conflict the character will become involved with.

The Vaha Empire invaded Earth. For a thousand years, Earth was under their rule. But one day, a strange phenomenon happened that changed the whole universe: the appearance of Magic, and the introduction of the Celestia system. How did the humans use the new power to take their independence back? What did they do after gaining it?​

Sounds like two very different story plots. Really depends on what you choose. Since I don't know much of your story go off on. That, and gotta call it a night.

It’s afternoon right now here.
Ugh… Let me just think about it. For now, I’ll write the prolouge.

 

[Deleted member 45782]

It’s afternoon right now here.
Ugh… Let me just think about it. For now, I’ll write the prolouge.

Different places, different time zones. Afternoon to you, midnight to others.
First let's ask this, how does the story revolve around your mc? Figure out your synopsis. A good synopsis will attract or deter readers.

 

[Nhatduongg]

Different places, different time zones. Afternoon to you, midnight to others.
First let's ask this, how does the story revolve around your mc? Figure out your synopsis. A good synopsis will attract or deter readers.

Hmm… it’s like the journey of characters discovering more and more about his identity (like in the prologue Masako discovered that Alice was her childhood friend). And that’s also the reason why I wrote the novel in 3rd person PoV or a random character’s PoV, but never Alice himself. Also I might want to trick the reader into believing this is Alice’s true identity, and then turns out it’s not.

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Hmm… it’s like the journey of characters discovering more and more about his identity (like in the prologue Masako discovered that Alice was her childhood friend). And that’s also the reason why I wrote the novel in 3rd person PoV or a random character’s PoV, but never Alice himself.

Still doesn't give much. I meant what has this character got to do with the Vaha empire conquering Earthlings who now found magic and want to resist?

 

[Nhatduongg]

Still doesn't give much. I meant what has this character got to do with the Vaha empire conquering Earthlings who now found magic and want to resist?

Humans didn’t actually found magic, it just suddenly appeared out of the blue. And Vaha attacked Earth because the Vaha Empire was basically like British Empire (colonies here, colonies there, colonies everywhere).

And also this thread got kinda long, you might want to continue the conversation via direct message…

 

[Deleted member 45782]

Based on what you gave us so far, here's a synopsis:

The Vaha Empire invaded Earth. For a thousand years, Earth was under their rule. But one day, a strange phenomenon happened that changed the whole universe: the appearance of Magic, and the introduction of the Celestia system.

I took out the two previous questions attached to the last part. Since you're gonna focus on a character and their role more than just a whole race that arming themselves with magic against an invader.

And in the midst of it all, was a mysterious man. Genius scientist, Arena Breaker, friend with high connections, there were so many things to him that even with each new discovery, there was still more than meets the eye. But who was he really, and what did he have to do with the humans' resistance to the Vaha empire?

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I get that humans didn't create magic. However what I do not get is how your character fits into it. You mention that magic now exists. An empire conquered earth. Alright.

Then suddenly a mysterious protagonist who likes to sleep. And thats bout it.

There's no connection from point a to b. Your first two sentences set up what the world was like. You have not mention how your character fits in the story besides like being lazy, sleep and find his own identity.

No, will not be responding to dm. Will be away after this for some time.