How do you write action scenes?

[PurpleXanmal]

Just use the power of friendship!

 

[Eldoria]

In short, your chapter was alright and offered some good insight in describing quick action through burst stand alone sentences. The sound effects are a neat touch, I add them to my fights as well, but I change the format and prefer keeping the sound effects apart to highlight the narrative impact. That's just my preference, not a critique towards your style of writing.

It wassss a bit tricky for me to follow because of some of the abilities they use, but I'm just am observer, not an active reader following along your work, so once again that's not a critique haha cx oh but the image was nice! Certainly helped visualize the scene for me.

It was alright, in short I think this would be better if I read the story, knew these characters and why they were fighting. Your chapter gave me a few pointers in how to write my own last night I made a post sharing that chapter link in the Latest Chapters Forum if you're interested. If not that's fine, I'd like to thank you for your response, insight, and for sharing your fight scene with me. It helped plenty!

This is more than 3 sentences. I appreciate your honest feedback. Thank you.