How do I write an proper beastkin story?

kokiboki

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I'm laughing at my own story, which is supposed to be horror, or perhaps psychological with some josei elements. It's not meant to make people laugh, but I think there's something wrong with my sense of humor because why am I giggling and kicking my feet after my main character just got slapped and murdered? It's a time loop story.

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How can I write a beastman story without sounding cliché? The main character always wakes up in a world untouched by humans and falls in love with these people who can transform into beasts. On rare occasions, they resemble werewolves and don't transform. It's always a love triangle or a polyamory situation. I was originally going to write in that direction, but then I thought, why would I want to write a romantic furry story? No hate on furries, by the way; I'm in a furry community on Discord.

Anyway, I decided to rewrite the whole plot to switch things up, but as soon as I started writing it with a more violent plot, I ended up writing it like a romance. How do I proceed? Any ideas or help?

I should probably change the title, as it currently sounds romantic. If I change the cover, will it make it look less romantic?
 

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Make them Furries. Nah, I'm just joking. Why don't you focus on heavy gore descriptions? Blood here, brain there, someone eating the organs or something.
I like that idea, ima splatter blood everywhere
 

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Disclaimer: I haven't read your story.

Your going back to romance may just be how your brain works. You want to make cool characters, they're so cool you (unconsciously) ship them, and you end up with romance...

Write a villain. Someone you actually would find despicable. And then let them loose at the protagonist(s) and their loved ones. Violence will start soon enough.
 

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Hello, first you write a time lop Story, they are good if you want internal characters development. But they aren’t great for a longer Plot, unless the Loop are longer.

For Example instead of Time Loop you could write it the following:
Ranas mess up and her tribe hate her.
Her Victim/ Bully force her to hold the apple on her head.
She dodges the Arrow but bleeds and has Wound / Scar on her Face.
Her Father is angry because She has that and is less easy to marry her off.
He sends her out to work in the Fields. The Vulture grabs her. She manages to to free herself. But she is know somewhere else.

End Example.
As you see if you don’t have death you can apply consequences like wounds and relationships changing. Pro Tip don’t go over board or your Character look like Pirates with three of their limbs out of Wood.

Description: How does the Village look. Are the Buffalo Tribe Humans, Semi Furry Humans with horns Ears and Tails or the Furries?
what do they wear and what color is it
How do the other tribe look?
How does the MC and other look.

Charatere: Is the MC suppose to be so incompetent and stumbling into her death scene? Why does every other tribe hate her? Has she something that she good at it, because as much people dislike OP Power Fantasy Characters a Character who only fails and loses is not much better.

what are your Story Ideas? Goes the MC on an adventure or does it all resolve in the village?
You write that you want to have Beast and Shifter in your Story. Are they Love Interest or Antragonist?

thank you for reading.
 

kokiboki

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Hello, first you write a time lop Story, they are good if you want internal characters development. But they aren’t great for a longer Plot, unless the Loop are longer.

For Example instead of Time Loop you could write it the following:
Ranas mess up and her tribe hate her.
Her Victim/ Bully force her to hold the apple on her head.
She dodges the Arrow but bleeds and has Wound / Scar on her Face.
Her Father is angry because She has that and is less easy to marry her off.
He sends her out to work in the Fields. The Vulture grabs her. She manages to to free herself. But she is know somewhere else.

End Example.
As you see if you don’t have death you can apply consequences like wounds and relationships changing. Pro Tip don’t go over board or your Character look like Pirates with three of their limbs out of Wood.

Description: How does the Village look. Are the Buffalo Tribe Humans, Semi Furry Humans with horns Ears and Tails or the Furries?
what do they wear and what color is it
How do the other tribe look?
How does the MC and other look.

Charatere: Is the MC suppose to be so incompetent and stumbling into her death scene? Why does every other tribe hate her? Has she something that she good at it, because as much people dislike OP Power Fantasy Characters a Character who only fails and loses is not much better.

what are your Story Ideas? Goes the MC on an adventure or does it all resolve in the village?
You write that you want to have Beast and Shifter in your Story. Are they Love Interest or Antragonist?

thank you for reading.
REal, i like it
 
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