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[shullia09]

Hello there! I am new here in scribble and I posted my first novel. I hope you guys check it out ! :)

Clodette

“Her ice-cold eyes gazed upon me enough to send shivers through my spine… before I knew it, I fell in love” - Claude “A Vampire named Clodette has isolated herself from the world due to her tragic past. She had tainted her hands with her beloved’s blood. Guilt, grief,...

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Clodette

“Her ice-cold eyes gazed upon me enough to send shivers through my spine… before I knew it, I fell in love” - Claude “A Vampire named Clodette has isolated herself from the world due to her tragic past. She had tainted her hands with her beloved’s blood. Guilt, grief,...

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Thankkkksssss!

You should fix the synopsis. You dont need the words "stare gaze" right by each other. Gaze would probably fit best here.

Wording is also a bit awkward through the whole quote.

Maybe say "...gaze upon me was enough to..."?

Anyway i LOVE that cover.

 

[shullia09]

You should fix the synopsis. You dont need the words "stare gaze" right by each other. Gaze would probably fit best here.

Wording is also a bit awkward through the whole quote.

Maybe say "...gaze upon me was enough to..."?

Anyway i LOVE that cover.

Thanks for that suggestion.