Hero Story Idea

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So, I want to write a superpower story, but every idea sounds like a rip-off of My Hero Academia, so I figure maybe it was how they got their powers; if I change that, it would differentiate itself. I'd like some feedback on the idea.

The Relic Age


The Awakening​


No one remembers who held the first relic. Some say it was forged in a laboratory, others that it fell from the sky like shards of broken gods. What is known is this: the objects chose. A man held a rusted dagger and conjured storms. A woman clasped a cracked locket and walked through fire. When they died, their relics did not perish with them. They reappeared, unburnt, waiting for new hands.


The world called them Power Objects—items that bound their wielder to supernatural force.




Collapse of the Old Order​


At first, governments tried to regulate them. Armies seized relics, scientists dissected them, corporations lobbied to patent them. But relics had their own will—compatibility varied wildly. A soldier given a C-ranked relic might sync at “–” and wield nothing more than sparks, while a street urchin with a “+” could bring cities to their knees.


The imbalance shattered the idea of nations. Borders meant nothing against individuals who could split mountains. Within decades, parliaments and presidents were toppled, replaced by those who commanded the strongest relics.




The Power Economy​


In the new age, relics became the only currency that mattered.


  • Corporations turned into power-brokers, buying and selling relics in brutal markets. They groomed compatibilities like bloodlines, running breeding programs to produce heirs more likely to bond at “+.”
  • Hero Societies rose, promising protection in exchange for loyalty. They wore capes and symbols but ruled as feudal lords.
  • Villain Syndicates thrived as their dark mirrors, calling themselves liberators of the poor but hoarding relics like dragons.
  • The Relicless—the powerless majority—lived as laborers, servants, or cannon fodder, clinging to the dream of one day touching an object that would elevate them.

Relics are ranked F to S, from trivial parlor tricks to powers that can rewrite landscapes. Each individual’s compatibility with a relic is graded –, N, or +, shifting their effective output. A C-ranked relic with a “+” wielder might rival a natural A.




The Eternal Cycle​


Because relics reappear upon death, they carry legacy. Every object has a history of wielders, battles, betrayals. Some are cursed, always dooming their owners. Some are worshiped, their appearance triggering wars. Children whisper their names like fairy tales: The Black Thorn. The Mirror Crown. The Iron Comet.


To kill a wielder is to gamble—will you inherit their strength, or will the relic reject you? This gamble fuels endless conflict. Hero and villain, corporation and syndicate, rebel and king: all circle around the eternal lottery of relics.




The World Now​


The old globe has splintered into city-states and power zones, each ruled by those with the strongest relics. Cities are fortresses, and countryside villages survive only under the patronage of a relic lord. Black markets thrive where relic fragments and counterfeit compatibility tests are sold.


Everyday life is measured by proximity to power:


  • The relicless or also known as Lessers scrape together wages, hoping to be sponsored.
  • Middle classes barter loyalties for a chance at lesser relics.
  • The elite trade S-ranked artifacts like crowns, forging dynasties of steel and flame.

And above them all, whispered in awe and fear, are the Eternal Names—the S-ranked relics whose wielders write history with each generation.
 

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If the characters are in a school to learn to use powers, it's going to be a Sky High/MHA/Xavier's Institute clone, no matter what (or Miss Perregrine's Home or the other three or four variations, including The Irregulars)...
If the characters just happen to be IN school, it shouldn't matter, as this has been part of a lot of characters, most notably Spider-Man, since the beginning.
But really, when you're working with superheroes, you are GOING to be "ripping off" something else, since they are, at their core, a merging of classical mythology, (if you have costumes and code names) carnival performers, and the pulp heroes like Zorro, The Domino Lady, The Shadow, The Spider, The Black Bat or the Green Llama (who themselves were often riffs on the original myths anyway), so making the story and characters stand out so that people only make those comparisons for the first few chapters, until they get engaged and stop seeing the parallels, should be your goal, not trying to reinvent the wheel (because I can guarantee, in that realm of fiction, someone else already did the same reinvention you're working on, and an early reader will know this and make a comment - for example, your description above has similarities to a series on NBC about five years ago - blanking on the title - and, if the Power Items have drawbacks as well, it might even draw parallels to Friday the Thirteenth - the Series or Warehouse Thirteen)
 

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If the characters are in a school to learn to use powers, it's going to be a Sky High/MHA/Xavier's Institute clone, no matter what (or Miss Perregrine's Home or the other three or four variations, including The Irregulars)...
If the characters just happen to be IN school, it shouldn't matter, as this has been part of a lot of characters, most notably Spider-Man, since the beginning.
But really, when you're working with superheroes, you are GOING to be "ripping off" something else, since they are, at their core, a merging of classical mythology, (if you have costumes and code names) carnival performers, and the pulp heroes like Zorro, The Domino Lady, The Shadow, The Spider, The Black Bat or the Green Llama (who themselves were often riffs on the original myths anyway), so making the story and characters stand out so that people only make those comparisons for the first few chapters, until they get engaged and stop seeing the parallels, should be your goal, not trying to reinvent the wheel (because I can guarantee, in that realm of fiction, someone else already did the same reinvention you're working on, and an early reader will know this and make a comment - for example, your description above has similarities to a series on NBC about five years ago - blanking on the title - and, if the Power Items have drawbacks as well, it might even draw parallels to Friday the Thirteenth - the Series or Warehouse Thirteen)
That is true, it does remind me of Warehouse 13 a little. That's good advice. So the main focus will be good characters and a captivating story so the reader focuses on that rather than trying to draw any similarities to other stories.
 

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Well, one way you could go about this is making the price for having a superpower real tough. Like, dead person kind of tough.
 

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Well, one way you could go about this is making the price for having a superpower real tough. Like, dead person kind of tough.
So, sort of like a corrupt society where only the rich, well-connected, and powerful are able to acquire superpowers, and the poor are trying to save up so that one child can get a low-tier power to improve their status.
 

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So, sort of like a corrupt society where only the rich, well-connected, and powerful are able to acquire superpowers, and the poor are trying to save up so that one child can get a low-tier power to improve their status.
Will likely lead to a very distopian society because when they hold all the money & power it never ends well for those at the bottom.
 

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So, sort of like a corrupt society where only the rich, well-connected, and powerful are able to acquire superpowers, and the poor are trying to save up so that one child can get a low-tier power to improve their status.
Not really. What I mean is that there is some kind of way to have a chance to obtain superpowers, but if you do get a superpower, there will be damages to your body.

For example, you need to consume special crystals, but if your body is not suited with the crystals (and there is no way to test except by directly consuming them), your organs will begin to morph into crystals, killing you eventually.

I read a story with a similar concept (not standard 'superpowers' though) named Diary of a Dead Wizard. It feels super unique, and the world feels believable / logical enough.
 

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For example, you need to consume special crystals, but if your body is not suited with the crystals (and there is no way to test except by directly consuming them), your organs will begin to morph into crystals, killing you eventually.

I read a story with a similar concept (not standard 'superpowers' though) named Diary of a Dead Wizard. It feels super unique, and the world feels believable / logical enough.
This is how Terragen (or is it Terrigen, or something else like that) works for Inhumans in the Marvel Universe - expose someone with the correct genetic markers to this in mist or crystal form, and they usually gain super powers (and almost always gain an enhanced physique as well - unless they're turned into something completely non-human, like the giant bulldog Lockjaw) - but those without the marker usually suffer a horrible, disfiguring death (and some WITH it suffer damage, either from the transformation, like Lockjaw becoming a giant dog but gaining teleportation abilities, or as a side effect from their powers, like Black Bolt being unable to speak because his voice is too strong, or like the TV version of Quake who was destroying her own skeletal system until they worked out a technical fix).
 

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This is how Terragen (or is it Terrigen, or something else like that) works for Inhumans in the Marvel Universe - expose someone with the correct genetic markers to this in mist or crystal form, and they usually gain super powers (and almost always gain an enhanced physique as well - unless they're turned into something completely non-human, like the giant bulldog Lockjaw) - but those without the marker usually suffer a horrible, disfiguring death (and some WITH it suffer damage, either from the transformation, like Lockjaw becoming a giant dog but gaining teleportation abilities, or as a side effect from their powers, like Black Bolt being unable to speak because his voice is too strong, or like the TV version of Quake who was destroying her own skeletal system until they worked out a technical fix).
Woa, the black bolt guy is the villain from the new marvel movie where he can make people go boop into shadows right
 

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Will likely lead to a very distopian society because when they hold all the money & power it never ends well for those at the bottom.
It would lead to a story where some of the 'villains' would actually be the good guys trying to bring down the corrupt system, while others just want to take what they can get. Since the heroes control everything, even if they commit crimes, they would just kill the witnesses and blame it on the villains. I think that could be an interesting take.
Not really. What I mean is that there is some kind of way to have a chance to obtain superpowers, but if you do get a superpower, there will be damages to your body.

For example, you need to consume special crystals, but if your body is not suited with the crystals (and there is no way to test except by directly consuming them), your organs will begin to morph into crystals, killing you eventually.

I read a story with a similar concept (not standard 'superpowers' though) named Diary of a Dead Wizard. It feels super unique, and the world feels believable / logical enough.
I could make there be a drawback to the - negative compatibility, where sometimes, due to lack of control, the power rips the user from the inside, causing them immense pain and even causing their power to lash out uncontrollably.
Woa, the black bolt guy is the villain from the new marvel movie where he can make people go boop into shadows right
No, that's the Void, Black Bolt is a guy born with a voice that can destroy anything, and he accidentally killed his parents, so he's forbidden to talk. The Hulk has tanked a whisper of his before, but it's noted that a scream would probably have killed him.
 
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I could make there be a drawback to the - negative compatibility, where sometimes, due to lack of control, the power rips the user from the inside, causing them immense pain and even causing their power to lash out uncontrollably.
Yeah, that'd be pretty cool. ALTHOUGH another idea is that you can make the superpower 'consume' the user if they're not compatible, mutating them into a vessel, where, these so called superpowers are actually some kind of chaos dudes from the stars or sum, and they became a source of mutation/chaos pollution in the real world.

This could lead to a worldbuilding where there are sub-realities, since strong humans with spatial capabilities cordoned off the polluted areas of the world or something.

OR another idea is that these superpowers are creatures of other dimensions where you can 'open' the channel your soul by consuming certain items, doing rituals or other things to invite these creatures to lend you their power. The drawback is that you must do/give something in return, otherwise they will take your soul to their dimension.
 

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Woa, the black bolt guy is the villain from the new marvel movie where he can make people go boop into shadows right
No, Blackagar Boltagon (his full name) is a leader of the Inhumans on the moon (except during his frequent oustings), and married to Medusa. His voice is so powerful, a whisper can shatter windows in about a quarter mile area, and if he shouts, he can trigger earthquakes.
 

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Make it a prison school. If you have powers, you are forced to be 'educated' in a government training program or else be 'rendered harmless' with brain surgery.

that completely avoids the hot potato of secret ID's and 'amateur' heroes.

The costume is how the government keeps tabs on it's 'heroes' and can only be removed in special facilities, or else it goes *boom*. Just the existence of this plotline makes the entire story practically write itself.
 

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Make it a prison school. If you have powers, you are forced to be 'educated' in a government training program or else be 'rendered harmless' with brain surgery.

that completely avoids the hot potato of secret ID's and 'amateur' heroes.

The costume is how the government keeps tabs on it's 'heroes' and can only be removed in special facilities, or else it goes *boom*. Just the existence of this plotline makes the entire story practically write itself.
That's an interesting plotline. It reminds me a bit of Talentless Nana.
 

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Flip the script.

MHA like world where there are heroes blah blah

The school you are going to write about is for vigilantes. It is a more private school, where the focus is more on how to deal with villain threats properly (aka Dead or Alive, preferably dead), instead of nursing the inflated egos of the normal students who attend hero schools.

You can even call it VASH Academy, using the old trope of hiding in plain sight for the REAL objective of the academy. Vigilantes Against Superhero Hubris.

I might read it, long as it has some waifus.
 

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Flip the script.

MHA like world where there are heroes blah blah

The school you are going to write about is for vigilantes. It is a more private school, where the focus is more on how to deal with villain threats properly (aka Dead or Alive, preferably dead), instead of nursing the inflated egos of the normal students who attend hero schools.

You can even call it VASH Academy, using the old trope of hiding in plain sight for the REAL objective of the academy. Vigilantes Against Superhero Hubris.

I might read it, long as it has some waifus.
How about a league of assassins trained to kill both Superheroes or Villains.
 

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How about a league of assassins trained to kill both Superheroes or Villains.
That could work. It would definitely be unique. 'there are no new stories' but there are certainly new variations.


Actually, that would be awesome. a group of specially trained assassins trained SPECIFICALLY to take out 'capes' when they step over the line. Basically, both heroes and villains are welcome to hurt each other, but when they start hurting people incapable of defending themselves....


Aww, crap, I just described the plot of my OWN book!
 
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That could work. It would definitely be unique. 'there are no new stories' but there are certainly new variations.


Actually, that would be awesome. a group of specially trained assassins trained SPECIFICALLY to take out 'capes' when they step over the line. Basically, both heroes and villains are welcome to hurt each other, but when they start hurting people incapable of defending themselves....


Aww, crap, I just described the plot of my OWN book!
Which one, I'll give it a read.
 

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Which one, I'll give it a read.

I am only 200 pages into it... It's the one I write every time I get pissed off at stupid politicians. Haven't posted it yet.

Actually I write when I am ticked off at modern 'let's tear everything apart' tropes, like... The Boys, and basically every marvel and star wars movie that's been made since Disney bought them and started using them to spread abominations. That's why I am already 200 pages in :P

But I'd love to see other writer's takes on the genre... nii07! you are called to arms! Muahahaha!
 
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I am only 200 pages into it... It's the one I write every time I get pissed off at stupid politicians. Haven't posted it yet.

Actually I write when I am ticked off at modern 'let's tear everything apart' tropes, like... The Boys, and basically every marvel and star wars movie that's been made since Disney bought them and started using them to spread abominations. That's why I am already 200 pages in :P

But I'd love to see other writer's takes on the genre... nii07! you are called to arms! Muahahaha!
I shall answer the call:blob_salute:
 
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