Here's a taste of my delicious story's SYNOPSIS!

[AuthorsDread]

Humankind set in motion a series of diabolical events which inevitably led to their species’ drastic retrogression and reduction. They were too late to acknowledge the errors of their erroneous lifestyle, hence a plethora of misfortune befell them in droves until they were completely driven to the bottom of the evolutionary ladder and subsequently on the higher rung of extinction.

Humankind's ill-fated braggadocio and nescient use of atomic energy cleared the corrupted whom of mother earth for the magnificent birthing of the Era of Crows.
With this radical paradigm shift, commenced a new phase in mother earth’s development as well as herald a new age of adventure and quantum consciousness advancement.

This series features a specific crow’s evolution; how he adopts in his newfound environment; how he copes with his peers; and above all, how he transcends from a weak fledging into a Prokeral God Crow!

Genre: (Action-Adventure, Mythical & Urban Fantasy, Spirit-Cultivation, Light-Romance, Overpowered Characters, Titans, Zombies, Evil Organisation, Mutated Beasts, Psychological Warfare, Military Might, Magical Powers, Levelling, World Exploration)

 

[CarburetorThompson]

Since it’s story feed back I’ll just give the tips I always give. Shorten it a bit, and try not to use flowery writing. I’d recommend going to the my anime list site and looking at one of their synopsis’ since they are all community written and reviewed.

 

[Deleted member 57675]

Humankind set in motion a series of diabolical events which inevitably led to their species’ drastic retrogression and reduction. They were too late to acknowledge the errors of their erroneous lifestyle, hence a plethora of misfortune befell them in droves until they were completely driven to the bottom of the evolutionary ladder and subsequently on the higher rung of extinction.

Humankind's ill-fated braggadocio and nescient use of atomic energy cleared the corrupted whom of mother earth for the magnificent birthing of the Era of Crows.
With this radical paradigm shift, commenced a new phase in mother earth’s development as well as herald a new age of adventure and quantum consciousness advancement.

This series features a specific crow’s evolution; how he adopts in his newfound environment; how he copes with his peers; and above all, how he transcends from a weak fledging into a Prokeral God Crow!

Genre: (Action-Adventure, Mythical & Urban Fantasy, Spirit-Cultivation, Light-Romance, Overpowered Characters, Titans, Zombies, Evil Organisation, Mutated Beasts, Psychological Warfare, Military Might, Magical Powers, Levelling, World Exploration)

Maybe stick to simpler words. Unless you can knit it together well. Paragraphs 1 was read twice to understand and Paragraph 2 was three times to understand what's going on in that one.

Whom of what? I did not understand the whom you're talking about in this sentence. If you replace whom with him or her, does it sound well? If not, maybe this sentence needs a rephrase without whom. Does not sound good grammar.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

I always recommend including a question or three to entice the reader. You can check out mine for examples. Links are in my signature. Please give me a one-star rating when you drop by ?

 

[Toripuru-S]

(take my opinion with a grain of salt , I am no expert in anything)

Bouncing off of everyone else. I agree that the synopsis feels too long and is hard to understand. I had no idea what the words "braggadocio" or "nescient" even meant, until I did a Google search. Granted, maybe other readers wouldn't have that problem, but I definitely did. Again, I can admit if my brain is small ?. It would be much safer to do interesting things with easy to understand words, instead of using too many big words.

I personally think the second paragraph has the pieces of a potentially great synopsis, after some cleaning up of course ??

 

[Ai-chan]

Humankind set in motion a series of diabolical events which inevitably led to their species’ drastic retrogression and reduction. They were too late to acknowledge the errors of their erroneous lifestyle, hence a plethora of misfortune befell them in droves until they were completely driven to the bottom of the evolutionary ladder and subsequently on the higher rung of extinction.

Humankind's ill-fated braggadocio and nescient use of atomic energy cleared the corrupted whom of mother earth for the magnificent birthing of the Era of Crows.
With this radical paradigm shift, commenced a new phase in mother earth’s development as well as herald a new age of adventure and quantum consciousness advancement.

This series features a specific crow’s evolution; how he adopts in his newfound environment; how he copes with his peers; and above all, how he transcends from a weak fledging into a Prokeral God Crow!

Genre: (Action-Adventure, Mythical & Urban Fantasy, Spirit-Cultivation, Light-Romance, Overpowered Characters, Titans, Zombies, Evil Organisation, Mutated Beasts, Psychological Warfare, Military Might, Magical Powers, Levelling, World Exploration)

Humankind's ill-fated braggadocio and nescient use of atomic energy cleared the corrupted whom of mother earth for the magnificent birthing of the Era of Crows.

Ai-chan literally (not figuratively) said, "What the fuck?" at this part here. What does that even mean?

Then Ai-chan read further and said "Dude, what the heck?". If you were trying to write gibberish, then you've totally succeeded. Reading to the end, Ai-chan thought, "This must be a joke, right? Or a parody?"

Were you trying to write a New Age Bullshit article even before Ai-chan made the writing prompt with that idea? Here's a tip. Grab a novel. Any novel. Look at the back cover. Compare what you wrote with what was written on the back cover of the novel. That is a synopsis.

If people walk into the bookstore, pick up your book and read the synopsis at the back, what do you think they will say? Ai-chan will tell you first, they won't say, "Wow, this is amazing. Take my money." Ai-chan doesn't know what they will say, but Ai-chan is almost perfectly sure that they will put it back right away.

Ai-chan is not trying to bring you down, but you asked for opinion. And it's bad. Ai-chan would normally mince words, but this is not something you want people to read. Or more like nobody wants to read it, the synopsis, that is.

 

[Irl_Rat]

This will come off very negative, but the synopsis gave off the air of "trying way too hard." It's not as though I cannot understand what you are trying to communicate, I just feel as though there was an excessive use of lesser known vocabulary.

Worse is how jarring it is when transitioning to this part:

This series features a specific crow’s evolution; how he adopts in his newfound environment; how he copes with his peers; and above all, how he transcends from a weak fledging into a Prokeral God Crow!

It started off as a pseudo-intellectual description of an off brand fallout then went to an almost immature description of the potential journey. The exclamation mark really does not do it any favors for tone.

Don't let this get you down, it's just an opportunity to improve and all authors have to start somewhere. But I will say that the synopsis is clear about the direction of the story, so that's a step in the right direction.

 

[AuthorsDread]

Very interesting feedback i see here. I can genuinely say that they have enlightened my creative cortex . If you have anything else to put forward, please go ahead. I like reading your thoughts on the matter.

This will come off very negative, but the synopsis gave off the air of "trying way too hard." It's not as though I cannot understand what you are trying to communicate, I just feel as though there was an excessive use of lesser known vocabulary.

Worse is how jarring it is when transitioning to this part:


It started off as a pseudo-intellectual description of an off brand fallout then went to an almost immature description of the potential journey. The exclamation mark really does not do it any favors for tone.

Don't let this get you down, it's just an opportunity to improve and all authors have to start somewhere. But I will say that the synopsis is clear about the direction of the story, so that's a step in the right direction.

Many thanks my friend.

I always recommend including a question or three to entice the reader. You can check out mine for examples. Links are in my signature. Please give me a one-star rating when you drop by ?

Not a bad idea. But why the one star only? Just curious.