I'm going to write this here because I wouldn't want this to be the first thing written on anyone's story:
-Synopsis is choppy. First sentence and second sentence oppose each other without clarification.
-Capitalization is inconsistent in the chapter titles, as well as chapter 1 content.
-There are basic English errors in the content. (Capitalization, missing appostrophes, missing spaces, typos)
-Some dialogue is really off-putting. It sounds like a bad translation of another language. ("There is a princess"? From a little boy?)
-Texting English. ("ur"?)
-Content doesn't read smoothly. There're too many unwarranted time skips throughout the entirety of chapter 1.
-Line breaks where there shouldn't be like breaks.
I really don't want to sound so rude, but the presentation makes it impossible for me to read further. I think you could fix a lot of these with a simple proofread.
