Hello! I'm looking for some feedback on the prologue & first chapter of my novel

dbhuck

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Name: A Tale of New Horizons

This is my first time sharing anything I've written but here we go! My story, A Tale of New Horizons (title may be changed) is going to mainly be LitRPG based, with hints of Sci-Fi, Fantasy, Action/Adventure. The story revolves around my MC, Virgil, being abducted from Earth and thrown into a large universe of survival through power. This is the first story I've written that I'm actually satisfied with, but I'm no professional writer. Just wanted some feedback on what I have so far, what I should improve & whether or not I should stick with the POVs I currently have or if I should switch things up and go for a FPV or TPV. Thanks!

Name: A Tale of New Horizons
 
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AncestorDuck

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Hello, can someone read my prologue and first chapter? I'm not telling you the name, because why would I? Just find it yourself!
 

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I've taken a look at it, and have written a comment in the first chapter. Mostly you need to fix issues with grammar and punctuation.
 
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