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[AdOtherwise]

Done. would not continue. It was good at the start but slowly I started noticing some problems. Some descriptions were awkward to read. It got a little too edgy at times. And while I CAN see the alleyway incident as realistic, the very first conflict he got himself into was very one dimensional and stupid. I also want to mention, the MC's personality is a bit inconsistent, but I can't say too much on that without reading further. I did add a review on the website, you can read that. Gave it a 5 star though, because I don't give anything below on main site.

Unfortunately so, the first conflict really does not make much sense but I didn't want to add stuff to explain. Accounted for it more towards a cultural thing people do to Contaminants or something. I really only wanted to focus on progressing the story. I did go back and tried to fix the edginess, though I don't know if I did a good job.

 

[Jaymi]

My story is a SoL so it might not suit your tastes, but I'll mention it here anyway so you can read it if you want.

Girlguide: A Girl’s Guide To Writing Female Characters!

Kai, an aspiring light novel author, has always had his path to success hindered by his inability to write female characters. However, everything changes when he wakes up one day as a young girl. This change becomes his chance to gain a deeper understanding of women, hoping to take his...

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[PeacefulMyst]

Would love your opinion on mine as well. You can leave your feedback in the ratings/reviews. Thanks.

Dark One [A Progression Fantasy]

Dark One is set in the kingdom of Vorthe, a land that has earned its peace and stability as a result of the efforts and sacrifices of past heroes. But alas, calamity draws near! A being of unearthly hunger for chaos and destruction, which leaves ghost cities in its wake —...

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done. Kind of in the middle of the road of continuing/non continuing tbh. I didn't really like some stuff(soap) though it started getting better again towards chapter 10.


General note: I hadn't been doing these for quite a while since I got sick then a bit busy with school work. (while yes, during the days I was sick I was so free I could've finished every request, however, this thread would have turned into Very Bad bashing your work thread. Either way, ill pick up the pace again from now.

 

[KersenBloemNL]

Aura: The soul’s true nature

Auras. These are a power that can only be used by a select few. They grant the user an unique ability linked to their soul. All auras come in unique shapes and forms. It is unknown how many people roam the gigantic city with one. Ymeno tries to live life...

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I wonder what your thoughts are on my story :)

 

[Kishi866]

please check out my story :) u can respond here

Age of the New Frontier [Progression Fantasy]

The New Frontier, A supposed land mass beyond the existing world with the potential to completely alter the societal norms of Pangea - the current regimes. Four individuals with intertwined fates set out to explore this land. Each carries their reason for embarking on the audacious expedition...

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[trigger2391]

please check out my story too thanks

Rise of the Lost

Caliban thought he was your typical young western male. Maybe a bit too heavy but nothing major, he smoked but not a lot. Work was merely to pay the bills and he had a bad habit of wasting his money on junk food, booze, women and entertainment. Until one night...

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[John_Owl]

I could go for a review. It is a smut story, so pardon that, but al the scenes are skippable. the prologue is basically all smut, but it's just a call out for existing readers, so you can start with chapter 1 without missing anything. besides that, all the smut chapters are marked NSFW.

However, the smut scenes are marked by a scene break (***), so you can skip those if you would rather not read it. and you can leave the feedback in the review section if you want.

Edit: forgot to say, it's DragonBound, link right below this, in my sig.

 

[nii07]

Do you mind checking out two of mine?

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843745/my-goddess-mother-gave-me-a-system-and-kicked-me-out/

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/843715/bleach-gazing-mirage/