Format feedback for no evil

[Farnott]

Hey guys! I just started posting my story no evil on Scribble Hub and wanted to get some feedback on the formatting I use.
The main character reads minds, something that's revealed early on but isn't addressed until chapter 4. I've got thoughts italicized and centered, and they're meant to be vague. That's taken care of.
What I'm more worried about is that I've been using something what I like to call "b-shots" since the original format was a mix between novel and screenplay. There's multiple instances where in between dialogue, scenes are shown with what they're talking about. I wanted to ask if this was easy to follow along with or if another method might be better to work this information in?

Link to the story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/108329/no-evil/

Thanks in advance!

 

[Nixil]

It's certainly very interesting. I first thought it was what Nora had seen, but I understood it was more like stage directions. After understanding what it was, it certainly made it a much more unique reading experience and were pretty easy to follow along.

In Umineko: When They Cry they had something called the Red Truth where it was text written in red and it was the truth no matter what. It was certainly an interesting tool and kind of similar to these "b-shots" as stage directions can't lie. The truth can be used to obscure things e.g. a character having multiple names. The "b-shots" could probably also function this way and add to the mystery if used well. It's just a thought though.

 

[Farnott]

In Umineko: When They Cry they had something called the Red Truth where it was text written in red and it was the truth no matter what. It was certainly an interesting tool and kind of similar to these "b-shots" as stage directions can't lie. The truth can be used to obscure things e.g. a character having multiple names. The "b-shots" could probably also function this way and add to the mystery if used well. It's just a thought though.

I was hoping to use it this way as the story progressed! I'll definitely check the story out you recommended. Thank you for the feedback!