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If anyone is willing I would like to see if I can get some fees on my mature Lit RPG/ Harem story. It's probably going to be terrible, but some criticism is better than none.

My Girlfriend's a Demon Incarnate!

 

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If anyone is willing I would like to see if I can get some fees on my mature Lit RPG/ Harem story. It's probably going to be terrible, but some criticism is better than none.

My Girlfriend's a Demon Incarnate!

msg me in the morning.