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[Zenomew]

Anybody interested in feedback swarp ? No BL please

This Sect is too much

The Sect leader who wants nothing more than a slow life Disciples who are hidden dragons and tigers Elders who are too many to bother counting Elder Wu :- Sect leader about our new elder...she is only four years old Sect leader:- How high is your cultivation again?...

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[PBJ_Time]

I'm down for it. My story isn't BL, but you probably wouldn't like the sort of "power fantasy" themes going on with my MC. Still, any feedback will be greatly appreciated. I'll edit this comment once I'm done checking your book.

Beware the Horde [Isekai LitRPG]

New chapters every MWF, 8:00 PM EST. Also available on Royal Road. *** ~Too raw to live, too far to die.~ MMA fanatic and local champion Hajime Kato once thought the world was his oyster. Now, after his untimely death, he gets thrown into a new reality dominated by a game screen...

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Edit: okay, so I read your first three chapters. Gotta say, your syntax and formatting needs work, especially with punctuation. There were missing periods, commas, and even missing question marks almost everywhere. Beyond that, I'd say the xianxia elements are decently used without being pretentious about it. In fact, it's pretty hilarious at times. As someone in your chapter comments said, this can be potentially peak if you worked more on these issues. I hope this helps.

 

[PensandKeys]

Anybody interested in feedback swarp ? No BL please

This Sect is too much

The Sect leader who wants nothing more than a slow life Disciples who are hidden dragons and tigers Elders who are too many to bother counting Elder Wu :- Sect leader about our new elder...she is only four years old Sect leader:- How high is your cultivation again?...

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If you are still doing swaps I am interested.