Feedback requested

[TinaMigarlo]

this is out of my newest writing project I'm working on.
just curious how I'm doing. What people think.
If its not unbearable the first chapter, it ends with what I think of as a cliff.
if it pulls at you to wonder enough to read the second chapter, so much the better.
one is about 3k, the other a little under 3k.

feel free to say anything at all.
I never take any offense.
I wish to be judged by a jury of my peers.

two sample chapters - chapter 16 | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

two sample chapters - chapter 17 | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Jaymi]

Hi, maybe link the story so we can actually read it >.>

 

[TinaMigarlo]

Hi, maybe link the story so we can actually read it >.>

oopsie.
a link would help, wouldn't it.
*link added*

 

[Th3Breadnought]

oopsie.
a link would help, wouldn't it.
*link added*

I relate to this so much. Lol

 

[Yusrohemendator]

Nice, is it available in google doc or pdf format

 

[TinaMigarlo]

after waiting how long, i got rid of the links. they'll be coming out in my book that's having chapters released. Also, in other news. i made a "sample chapter" for another thread. I went and checked, it 404'd. not a translation, zero smut content. System just erased it, don't know why. Mind you, I can "see" it on my dashboard, but I click my own link... 404. Not sure what rule that violated. No one tells you when they delete stuff, or why.