Feedback on the first few microchapters please?

[SLP]

I'm seeking someone who reads like a knife and isn't afraid to cut!

Wycked Wyrd — fantasy, erotica, horror, maybe even sacred blasphemy depending on how deep you read.

I'm not asking, "Do you like it". But:

• Where did it lose you?
• What felt fake or forced?
• What emotion (if any) did it drag out of you?
• What made you want to stop?
• What do you wish I hadn't said — or had the guts to say more clearly?
• Or if you want to slice deeper, I won't flinch.

Thanks so much in advance!
SLP

 

[Humanistheart]

So, why micro chaptes right off the bat?

 

[SLP]

So, why micro chaptes right off the bat?

Well I was hoping quicker feedback — I don't wanna be 30 chapters in to have to burn it all down...

Plus, I thought the length of a tweet is perfect for busy people nowadays.

 

[Humanistheart]

Well I was hoping quicker feedback — I don't wanna be 30 chapters in to have to burn it all down...

Plus, I thought the length of a tweet is perfect for busy people nowadays.

ha! well yeah attention spans are certainly lower these days. I think I'll follow your story just to see how the stats turn out.

 

[SLP]

ha! well yeah attention spans are certainly lower these days. I think I'll follow your story just to see how the stats turn out.

Sure but I'm thinking of starting over though

 

[Zinless]

Well I was hoping quicker feedback — I don't wanna be 30 chapters in to have to burn it all down...

Plus, I thought the length of a tweet is perfect for busy people nowadays.

I get your point, but this is a bit too micro.

When people suggest shorter chapters to accommodate shorter attention spans, they often mean a range of 1000-2000 words.

 

[Supperset]

I'm seeking someone who reads like a knife and isn't afraid to cut!

Wycked Wyrd — fantasy, erotica, horror, maybe even sacred blasphemy depending on how deep you read.

I'm not asking, "Do you like it". But:

• Where did it lose you?
• What felt fake or forced?
• What emotion (if any) did it drag out of you?
• What made you want to stop?
• What do you wish I hadn't said — or had the guts to say more clearly?
• Or if you want to slice deeper, I won't flinch.

Thanks so much in advance!
SLP

These are shorter than the life span of a fly.

 

[Humanistheart]

Sure but I'm thinking of starting over though

If you do you might want to leave these, mention they were a prototype. If your new story takes off people might like reading them to see where your story evolved from.