Sweet!
It's such a fresh experience for me since I rarely read a story from a female lead perspective, though technically it's a 3rd person perspective.
Anyway, great way of storytelling because the characters actions and emotions written descriptively. it feels like those motivations stories in a YouTube videos or some motivational webinar, but they were written in text.
The story makes me think of how fickle human life is. Noone knows what would happen in the future.
As for the grammar, I don't really find things to comment on, because I have a poor grammar too (lul). There is a missing ["] sign maybe the author forgot to type it/
I like how you use simple diction for the story. Some people may prefer a diverse choice of words for the stories (especially the bri'ish), but I prefer the simple one because readers come from every corner of the world, it's not like they have an enormous bank of vocabulary in their heads. So yeah, I like it.
As for the cons, I think the story feels a lack of emotion. Even though the characters's emotions written greatly but the story itself is not quite catchy.
Maybe it's because the lack of chapters so that makes the interaction between the main characters (husband and wife) feels bland. Maybe you should add more chapters of how the main characters interact with each other. Give them some lovey dovey filler chapter so the readers can feel the ending and you can make a greater impact of emotions on them (which is the primary purpose of these kinds of stories).
All in all, I recommend this story if you want a quick read around 5 to 15 minutes.
8.4/10.
eep, I might as well write this in the story review.
