Feadbeck, kind strangers?

[CYY]

Hey, this book is a project I've been working on for the past... three months? Though I started publishing a bit later than that.
Would love any feedback - synopsis, first impression, story writing, pacing - basically anything. Take one look at my synopsis, and tell me it's not eye-catching or interesting enough, read a few chapters and tell me it doesn't have a good hook and could use a lot of proofreading.... I appreciate any advice!
Thank you!

Soulcarved Mage

He has only known the brutal training of his father, the Grand Magus of Metal. Xvalkken's life is an endless cycle of torture, and his future is imprisonment. His only choice is to run. Fleeing into the dread Forest of the Damned Souls, Xvalkken discovers a truth buried by millennia...

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[IWILLDEFYTHEHEAVENS]

The synopsis is good as I got an overview of what the book is like.
But the prologue threw me off, there is little explanation for the actions, like they are too concise and refined.

You should also introduce the characters and differentiate them before delving deep into their act.
I already knew who Elijah is from the synopsis, but who is the Vlad... Something?
And another confusing name I saw there.

Just a little description like the hair, eyes color, dressing or even the way each characters speak will let readers create an image in their mind.
Another important thing, your knowledge is not the readers knowledge, how am I supposed to know who the elementals are when you didn't introduce them?

There are also some other names that I couldn't picture who or what they are.

All in all, your descriptions are too terse, even the fight scene doesn't seem like one

 

[CYY]

The synopsis is good as I got an overview of what the book is like.
But the prologue threw me off, there is little explanation for the actions, like they are too concise and refined.

You should also introduce the characters and differentiate them before delving deep into their act.
I already knew who Elijah is from the synopsis, but who is the Vlad... Something?
And another confusing name I saw there.

Just a little description like the hair, eyes color, dressing or even the way each characters speak will let readers create an image in their mind.
Another important thing, your knowledge is not the readers knowledge, how am I supposed to know who the elementals are when you didn't introduce them?

There are also some other names that I couldn't picture who or what they are.

All in all, your descriptions are too terse, even the fight scene doesn't seem like one

Hmm. Thank you for your feedback!
Elijah was not in the synopsis, he's supposed to be a small detail in the book not a character. And there is no one name Vlad... If you mean Xvalkken, his name is supposed to be a naming convention for the people who stayed in the area where he grew up.
But the description part - that makes sense! I'll try to add some life and details to the characters!