Fables of the Void Feedback

[GlenWald]

So here is the story... I'm a lover of Science Fiction and fantasy, I enjoy getting lost in worlds that do not exist and muse about characters that are a figment of my imagination. With this love I've created the story of Fables of the Void... Twelve years in the making and still many more years to go. The first book and two side stories have been published to Scribblehub, however I have not received much or any feedback and would love to receive some. Now, I do understand there are thousands of stories floating on the site and it is sometimes difficult for anyone to spot a good story when they all sound very much alike. I'm not saying my story is unique or the best, on the contrary it is quite the opposite. Being an absolute fan of Star Wars I could not resist writing many aspects of SW into it, also there are many other influences from various tv shows and Anime that I've incorporated making it somewhat a complicated web of influences from across the board. So no, it is not unique, it is a combination of everything I love to watch and read. It is also not the best written piece of literature out, my native language is not English and I do not have the funds to hire an editor or beta readers. However, I do need feedback and honest critique, not on grammar but on content. I need people with knowledge to tell me why the story works or why its a complete waste of time. I have fallen into bad times financially due to back injury and the lot so I need to know that I can continue to build on this story and to publish it to Patreon to continue in trying to build a followship and that it is not a waste of time or whether or not I should abandon it and move on to something that would help me more.

You can find all Free Chapters of all three available stories here: GlenWald's Profile | Scribble Hub

I really appreciate any feedback.

 

[Deleted member 57675]

bump. Hope your recover from your back injury and may you find a beta reader/feedback reader soon.

 

[greyblob]

so this is from a new - adhd/brain fried - reader's perspective. your first chapter is 75% exposition and info dumping. you gave me no reason to continue and nothing to latch onto. besides that, some of your descriptions are quite vague, and there is a good number of unnecessarily complex sentences. that says nothing about the story as a whole though.

I need to know that I can continue to build on this story and to publish it to Patreon to continue in trying to build a followship and that it is not a waste of time or whether or not I should abandon it and move on to something that would help me more.

that's ultimately your choice, but statistically speaking, a novel with 80k words with 40 readers won't do well on Patreon, or for future growth for that matter. which brings me to my main question: Are you viewbotting your novel? almost every chapter has 5~6k views. it's very unnatural