Writing Envy Lesson: Use Stronger Verbs Instead of Adverbs

[JayMark]

The bull strongly, quickly, masculinely, heroicly, bravely, stoicly, enduringly, manlyly, sexily, smoothly, deftly pulled the cart.

 

[Envylope]

The bull strongly, quickly, masculinely, heroicly, bravely, stoicly, enduringly, manlyly, sexily, smoothly, deftly pulled the cart.

That's the worst sentence I've ever seen.

 

[JayMark]

That's the worst sentence I've ever seen.

I hardly even tried.

 

[Envylope]

I hardly even tried.

Envy: You might be the worst writer I've ever heard of.

Jaymark: But you have heard of me...

 

[ThrillingHuman]

The bull strongly, quickly, masculinely, heroicly, bravely, stoicly, enduringly, manlyly, sexily, smoothly, deftly pulled the cart.

the yak yanked the yield
the cow carted the cart
the bull brought the barrow

 

[CharlesEBrown]

If you need a minimum word count, sometimes those adverbs are worth their weight in gold... Other times, they just drag it down.

 

[DireBadger]

adverbs are one of those things that shouldn't be avoided, they need to be EXPERIENCED... sometimes an adverb tells the story you want told.

Get better, hard and fast rules only work for hard and fast creation.

 

[Envylope]

adverbs are one of those things that shouldn't be avoided, they need to be EXPERIENCED... sometimes an adverb tells the story you want told.

Get better, hard and fast rules only work for hard and fast creation.

Don't be a midwit. Decide for yourself if what you are doing makes sense to you.

That's about it. Blehbye...?

 

[JayMark]

adverbs are one of those things that shouldn't be avoided, they need to be EXPERIENCED... sometimes an adverb tells the story you want told.

Get better, hard and fast rules only work for hard and fast creation.

I go back and look at all my adverbs. And I ask myself, "Marky Moo, does this adverb make you feel joy?" And if the answer is no, then it's obviously not adding anything, just sitting there taking up space and wasting the reader's time. And when that happens.

I moo at it. I give it a long loud proud rowdy eccentric low-pitched moo. And then I thank myself for a job well done.

 

[Joelle]

I agree with Maelstrom556, it's hard to think about using strong verbs and such when in the flow. I guess it'd be better to think about it when done pouring out your creativity. Thanks for the masterpiece

 

[Envylope]

I agree with Maelstrom556, it's hard to think about using strong verbs and such when in the flow. I guess it'd be better to think about it when done pouring out your creativity. Thanks for the masterpiece

The point is more to think about it. I use adverbs as well when I am trying to get words down. It makes it easy to spit out the words, so I don't get stuck on how I am saying it. Concision is important for a reason. Readers will not get stuck on your word flow if you are concise. You can still make some longer sentences, but imagine reading a long sentence with tons of adverbs. It will drag on the sentence even more.

 

[Corty]

She tried helping, over and over but they weren't listening.

FarCry3.meme

 

[Joelle]

I have a problem with consistency though. I don't know how long I'll be able to toggle writing, studying and still having time for myself, its exhausting. That's why I'm still looking for some writing advice, and release schedule cause 2 chapters a day is stressing me out???.
Check out my work:

Spoiler: Current Work

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[CharlesEBrown]

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Lolly Lolly Lolly, got some adverbs here!
Come on down to Lolly's, get the adverbs here!
You're going to need
If you write or read
Or even think about it.

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Got a lot of Lolly, jolly adverbs here!
Anything you need
And we can make it absolutely clear!

An adverb is a word...
That modifies a verb...
It modifies an adjective,
Or else another adverb.
And so you see that it's positively, very, very, necessary.

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Father, son and Lolly selling adverbs here!
Got a lot of adverbs and we make it clear,
So come to Lolly!

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Quickly quickly quickly, get your adverbs here!
Slowly surely really, learn your adverbs here!
You're going need 'em
If you read 'em,
If you write or talk or think about it.

Lolly...

If it's an adverb we have it at Lolly's!
Bring along your old adjectives too, like slow, soft and sure.
We'll fit them out with our "l-y" attachment,
And make perfectly good adverbs out of them!>

Get your adverbs here!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Father Son and Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Indubitably!

 

[Envylope]

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Lolly Lolly Lolly, got some adverbs here!
Come on down to Lolly's, get the adverbs here!
You're going to need
If you write or read
Or even think about it.

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Got a lot of Lolly, jolly adverbs here!
Anything you need
And we can make it absolutely clear!

An adverb is a word...
That modifies a verb...
It modifies an adjective,
Or else another adverb.
And so you see that it's positively, very, very, necessary.

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Father, son and Lolly selling adverbs here!
Got a lot of adverbs and we make it clear,
So come to Lolly!

Lolly Lolly Lolly, get your adverbs here!
Quickly quickly quickly, get your adverbs here!
Slowly surely really, learn your adverbs here!
You're going need 'em
If you read 'em,
If you write or talk or think about it.

Lolly...

If it's an adverb we have it at Lolly's!
Bring along your old adjectives too, like slow, soft and sure.
We'll fit them out with our "l-y" attachment,
And make perfectly good adverbs out of them!>

Get your adverbs here!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Father Son and Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Lolly, Lolly, Lolly!
Indubitably!

*Envy quickly and strongly flips your adverb table.* Get those shits out of here.

 

[melchi]

This is good.

 

[AYM]

 

[unlaumy]

adverbs are one of those things that shouldn't be avoided, they need to be EXPERIENCED... sometimes an adverb tells the story you want told.

Get better, hard and fast rules only work for hard and fast creation.

Notice that every example in the OP is action. Personally, I agree with you. But when you write a story that doesn't focus on descriptions to anchor it down, you will quickly notice the monotony. Using only basic verbs without flair is too weak, but putting a -ly adverb in every new sentence is just too much. So you really have to focus on using stronger verbs.