Does this premise sound good?

Notadate

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It’s a setting. And that’s an interesting setting but you need details about what’s going to happen at least in a professional and provocative way for yourself before you translate that to your readers into some kind of introduction.

This is kind of a bad example from me because I basically abandoned this particular narrative for the moment.

Ciara Reid is a simple librarian in the human-fae border city of Maysra. She's still getting the hang of her fetch; a magical, mischievous doppelganger who seems to cause more trouble than she's worth. But, on the eve of Samhain, a shared holiday on October 31st celebrating the peace between human and fae, she receives a mysterious book which could hold the fate of all worlds in the balance. Pulled into an ancient conflict, Ciara must journey far to defend those she loves against dark, undying forces.

that’s the description of the narrative that I came up with but the part in bold is basically what you have translates to. It’s where the story is set and what’s happening. But it’s not the story of the character that you’re telling.

Think of it like OK there’s this crazy fantasy Florida so how is the world different from our own and possibly also allegorical in that there’s creatures that live in the swamp that you have to be aware of and there are hunting parties or there are tourists and there’s an upset when someone is murdered or someone is seeking the crown for this Floridian kingdom etc. there’s a lot you can do with that kind of setting once you place characters in it there was actually a really cool Tumblr post a while ago that captivated me in describing southern lovecrafty Gothic.
Already started writing it. Pretty much going with three mc’s. A human running off fragments of memories, a king complex alligator, and curious lichen.


The current chapter has been of Human wakes up, almost drowns, gets attack by alligator, Downpour started, something happened to the human. Alligator blinded, is now running away.
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I’m on Ch.2 now
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MajorKerina

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A place that only rains it an interesting start but I was confused about the rest. Feature the characters who have to deal with this and the change. Someone posted a format for introductions but it tends to be...

1) How things are.
2) Something changes.
3) What now/next?
 
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