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Also is this a Synopsis or a Chapter?
An unfinished chapter.
Here, I fixed some stuff and some grammar errors. Sorry for troubling you.
Black, All I see is black and emptiness, but not so long as I got to see my
hands and the other rest of my body. Saying that I was confused and scared is an
understatement, then suddenly in this darkness, a Stage Lighting shone on
particular spot, when I got close and looked closely I saw a beautiful Longsword
whose Hilt and Crossguard are crystal black, and the blade which had a beautiful
shining silver colour. For others it might be a plain looking sword, but for me
I feel like it's special, and etherial. But besides the sword I saw a black
human like figure that was standing right next to it.
It was for the first time in my life that I saw someone that looked like a
shadow with no face. Then after a short amount of time, it faced my direction
and it opened it's mouth to show it's white inhuman like teeth with a very wide
grin on it's face.
And that was the last thing I saw in that dream.
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*Year:2030*
"Arthur, get up!" Said the mother, calling her son.
Hearing my Mother's call, I groggily woke up from my bed, and wiped my eyes from
laziness, "Alright Mom, I am going down," I went to the bathroom to wash my
hands, then I looked at the mirror.
I am a 17-year-old boy called Arthur, a Teenager with blonde hair, and brown
honey eyes Like my mother, I go to school, and practice Swordsmanship in my free
time, I also like playing video games, and watching Anime.
While I was wasting my time examining myself, I heard my Mother sound again, but
she sounded very angry, so I stopped wasting time, and washed my face, then I
dried myself with a towel, and hastily went to the waredrobe to change my
clothes.
I chose to wear a red T-shirt, and a Navy Blue Cargo Jeans, then I carefully
walked down the stairs, and greeted my Mother.
"Finally you got here, I thought that I might had to resort to using my
Swordsmanship on you" Said my Mother with a small yet terrifying grin.
"Please no, I don't want to be put on the verge of my life again," I said
pleadingly.
"I am just joking dear, but no worries it won't happen again," only if you are
doing something bad, she quietly muttered to her self.
Because we are a part of a an ancient family called "Astrabisons" a family that
orginated from the west, we are known for our ability in Swordsmanship.
Although, no one uses Swordsmanship these days, since there are more modern and
powerful weapons, it's more used for Sportsmanship or Self-defense but then
again, who weilds a sword in public for Self-defense anyways?
I was stopped from thinking anymore about the subject, when my Mother has
brought Breakfast. So I thanked my mother, and started digging in the food.
"So how is your school?" my Mother said, while eating some fried eggs with her
fork. "Pretty good I guess?," I replied, while also eating a tasty waffle.
"I am trying to practice Swordsmanship more, so I can get better than you," then
I drank my orange juice, and finished my tasty Breakfast very fast, so I can go
to the sink to wash my hands.
"I also wish to become a Master at Swordsmanship like our ancestor Cipher," I
said with enthusiasm.
"That's a big goal, and a hard one at that too ,but I won't mind aslong as you
care about yourself, and be a good man like your Father," said my Mom with a sad
voice, while washing the dishes.
My Mother's name is Sara Astra, and she has been sad since my Father's death,
whose name is Haru Astra, I remember that I was 7-year-old kid at that time. My
Mother says that he was a kind person that cared about everyone, but sadly he
died from an unkown illness.
Since then, me and my Mother lived alone, so my mother had to move to an another
city to find a new job, so we had moved to a place called Sakura City, where she
found a new job that paid very well, so she can keep us happy, healthy and
entertained.
"Don't worry mom I will become a good guy, and help the weak," I went and kissed
my mother's cheeks, then went upstairs, "thanks for the food mom, I love you,"
then I continued my way to my room.
Few seconds have passed, while she looked at her son's back going to his room.
She smiled, and started organising the cleaned dishes, then she muttered "Our
Son has grown alot since you left Dear," with a happy smile on her face.
................................................................................
*After Dinner*
I'm not the best when it comes to grammar, but I'm confident enough at least to say that there's a lot of missing and/or misused punctuation.
This, for instance:
Hearing my Mother's call I groggily woke up from bed and wiped my eyes from laziness "Alright Mom, I am going down," I went to the bathroom, washed my hands and looked at the mirror, I am a 17-year-old boy with blonde hair and brown honey eyes Like my mother, I go to school and practice Swordsmanship in my free time, I also like playing video games and watching Anime.
My edit:
Hearing my Mother's call, I groggily woke up from bed and wiped my eyes from laziness.
"Alright Mom, I'm going down."
I went to the bathroom, washed my hands and looked at the mirror. I am a 17-year-old boy with blonde hair and brown honey eyes like my mother. I go to school and practice Swordsmanship in my free time, and I also like playing video games and watching Anime.
...And this is just fixing the punctuations. I won't mention how the sentences should be structured since it can be based off of personal preferences.
Thanks! I polished it more, I think.
Sorry for troubling you.
Black, All I see is black and emptiness, but not so long as I got to see my
hands and the other rest of my body. Saying that I was confused and scared is an
understatement, then suddenly in this darkness, a Stage Lighting shone on
particular spot, when I got close and looked closely I saw a beautiful Longsword
whose Hilt and Crossguard are crystal black, and the blade which had a beautiful
shining silver colour. For others it might be a plain looking sword, but for me
I feel like it's special, and etherial. But besides the sword I saw a black
human like figure that was standing right next to it.
It was for the first time in my life that I saw someone that looked like a
shadow with no face. Then after a short amount of time, it faced my direction
and it opened it's mouth to show it's white inhuman like teeth with a very wide
grin on it's face.
And that was the last thing I saw in that dream.
................................................................................
*Year:2030*
"Arthur, get up!" Said the mother, calling her son.
Hearing my Mother's call, I groggily woke up from my bed, and wiped my eyes from
laziness, "Alright Mom, I am going down," I went to the bathroom to wash my
hands, then I looked at the mirror.
I am a 17-year-old boy called Arthur, a Teenager with blonde hair, and brown
honey eyes Like my mother, I go to school, and practice Swordsmanship in my free
time, I also like playing video games, and watching Anime.
While I was wasting my time examining myself, I heard my Mother sound again, but
she sounded very angry, so I stopped wasting time, and washed my face, then I
dried myself with a towel, and hastily went to the waredrobe to change my
clothes.
I chose to wear a red T-shirt, and a Navy Blue Cargo Jeans, then I carefully
walked down the stairs, and greeted my Mother.
"Finally you got here, I thought that I might had to resort to using my
Swordsmanship on you" Said my Mother with a small yet terrifying grin.
"Please no, I don't want to be put on the verge of my life again," I said
pleadingly.
"I am just joking dear, but no worries it won't happen again," only if you are
doing something bad, she quietly muttered to her self.
Because we are a part of a an ancient family called "Astrabisons" a family that
orginated from the west, we are known for our ability in Swordsmanship.
Although, no one uses Swordsmanship these days, since there are more modern and
powerful weapons, it's more used for Sportsmanship or Self-defense but then
again, who weilds a sword in public for Self-defense anyways?
I was stopped from thinking anymore about the subject, when my Mother has
brought Breakfast. So I thanked my mother, and started digging in the food.
"So how is your school?" my Mother said, while eating some fried eggs with her
fork. "Pretty good I guess?," I replied, while also eating a tasty waffle.
"I am trying to practice Swordsmanship more, so I can get better than you," then
I drank my orange juice, and finished my tasty Breakfast very fast, so I can go
to the sink to wash my hands.
"I also wish to become a Master at Swordsmanship like our ancestor Cipher," I
said with enthusiasm.
"That's a big goal, and a hard one at that too ,but I won't mind aslong as you
care about yourself, and be a good man like your Father," said my Mom with a sad
voice, while washing the dishes.
My Mother's name is Sara Astra, and she has been sad since my Father's death,
whose name is Haru Astra, I remember that I was 7-year-old kid at that time. My
Mother says that he was a kind person that cared about everyone, but sadly he
died from an unkown illness.
Since then, me and my Mother lived alone, so my mother had to move to an another
city to find a new job, so we had moved to a place called Sakura City, where she
found a new job that paid very well, so she can keep us happy, healthy and
entertained.
"Don't worry mom I will become a good guy, and help the weak," I went and kissed
my mother's cheeks, then went upstairs, "thanks for the food mom, I love you,"
then I continued my way to my room.
Few seconds have passed, while she looked at her son's back going to his room.
She smiled, and started organising the cleaned dishes, then she muttered "Our
Son has grown alot since you left Dear," with a happy smile on her face.
................................................................................
*After Dinner*
Also, can I talk about how copy and paste, reorganised the order of the story?
