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SirContro

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I am diagnosed with severe anxiety?
That sucks. You know what would make you feel better?

An epic dark fantasy about hunting pirates!
 

Conqueror_Quack

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I suffer from ADHD and the call of the Void phenomenon.

Don't forget to check out my Pirate dark fantasy ✌️
Posting your story here again and again in the wrong thread isn't going to make people here read it. If you are looking for constructive criticism then either post it into a thread dedicated for it in the 'story feedback' subforum or make a separate thread for it. If you want to announce your latest chapters then post it in the 'latest chapter discussion' subforum. Though I doubt it would make people here flock to your story.
 

SirContro

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Posting your story here again and again in the wrong thread isn't going to make people here read it. If you are looking for constructive criticism then either post it into a thread dedicated for it in the 'story feedback' subforum or make a separate thread for it. If you want to announce your latest chapters then post it in the 'latest chapter discussion' subforum. Though I doubt it would make people here flock to your story.
Technically, this is general chat.
 

JayMark

It's Not Easy Being Nobody, But Somebody Has To.
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I will say this on scanning the first chapter, it looks human written to me except maybe grammar checker, which is fine. I have trouble telling these days, but I have almost zero suspicion of AI and for that alone it deserves praise.

It also looks like the author had a lot of fun writing it. This is a premise that could become quite popular if well executed. Maybe OneP inspired but I don't see it beeing an obvious fanfiction. Seems like it was written by someone who might grow into decent writer someday if they stick around and suffer for their development.

Problems: Very unpolished narrative, some cringe scenes that seem gratuitous and unneccessary without proper development behind them, too many one sentence paragraphs, some formating clunk.

But I'm writing myself, and only scanned, not enough time to do it justice, so take all this with a grain of salt and good luck with your story.
 

SirContro

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I will say this on scanning the first chapter, it looks human written to me except maybe grammar checker, which is fine. I have trouble telling these days, but I have almost zero suspicion of AI and for that alone it deserves praise.

It also looks like the author had a lot of fun writing it. This is a premise that could become quite popular if well executed. Maybe OneP inspired but I don't see it beeing an obvious fanfiction. Seems like it was written by someone who might grow into decent writer someday if they stick around and suffer for their development.

Problems: Very unpolished, some cringe scenes that seem gratuitous and unneccessary without proper development behind them, too many one sentence paragraphs, some formating clunk.

But I'm writing myself and only scanned, not enough time to do it justice, so take all this with a grain of salt and good luck with your story.
In short. You did the bare minimum, and still ended up with a steaming pile of garbage which you couldn't even be bothered to proofread before advertising, but at least you had fun. :blobthumbsup:
 

JayMark

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In short. You did the bare minimum, and still ended up with a steaming pile of garbage which you couldn't even be bothered to proofread before advertising, but at least you had fun. :blobthumbsup:
Everytime I roast someone it comes back with double negative karma, so I try to be honest and nice. Writer has potential and should not give up, but they need to work on descriptive craft and narrative flow.

I beg to differ
Yes, sauce. Because I have trouble telling and will assume a certain amount of polish from AI, plus AI won't generally do the cringe scenes crudely told that I witnessed.
 
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