This chapter has active content commentary. I won't criticize your content, as readers already enjoy it.
Instead, I'll offer some feedback as a reader regarding your chapter format. First, it's best to keep each paragraph to a maximum of three sentences. This will provide more mobile-friendly visibility and won't tire readers.
Second, separate your dialogue from the context/story description so readers can more comfortably follow the conversations between characters. By separating the dialogue, readers can even read the dialogue directly without description, allowing them to immediately grasp the story's conflict (some readers don't even bother with long-winded explanations and skip the info dump, jumping straight to the dialogue).
Third, it's best not to use blank lines unless they're describing the different subplots. It's best to simply write each paragraph straight in the lines without any blank lines. If you use blank lines, the reading flow will be interrupted, making the reader feel like the plot is blocked and doesn't flow.
Additional: If you are making your novel into a series with many arcs then you should provide a standard format for naming the titles of each chapter. This will make it easier for readers to navigate what arc they want to read and where it will end. For example Vol. 1 Ch. 1: Chapter title. Even if your novel is not divided into arcs, you should still use chapter numbering, for example chapter 1: Chapter title. Systematic chapter indexing will make it easier for readers to navigate your novel.
Those are my three suggestions, I hope they're helpful. Regards.
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