Chapter 04 is up! Feedback please!

[FrenzyWanderer]

I refuse to level up! (Don’t ask about my sister’s opinion on this)

What would any normal person do after they isekai'ed to another world? Well that shouldn't even be a question. Grind up levels, become strong and conquer the world with overpowered cheat abilities. But Ren isn't that kind of 'Normal' What if he conquers the world without levelling up? without...

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Thank you in advance

 

[Ararara]

I like it, but like half of your sentences are missing periods after the last word.

Makes it a lot harder to read.

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

I like it, but like half of your sentences are missing periods after the last word.

Makes it a lot harder to read.

Good sign that they are human~.

 

[FrenzyWanderer]

Good sign that they are human~.

What do you mean?

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

What do you mean?

There are lots of AI stories out there these days~.

 

[FrenzyWanderer]

I like it, but like half of your sentences are missing periods after the last word.

Makes it a lot harder to read.

Thank you, did you read until chapter 04, since I kind of messed up in the pre isekai part. Because I wrote them hastily to publish

Did you think ch01 and ch02 are bad? Compared to second scene of chapter 03 and chapter 04


Fixed the fullstop (.) From chapter 04


Thank you so much again for the feedback, I'm thinking whether to remove ch01 and ch02 entirely and start from post isekai
And revealed backstory though flashbacks (that was my original plan) but I thought people wouldn't get to know MC and scribbled a pre isekai section hastily

Did you feel like dropping the series by the end of chapter 02?

There are lots of AI stories out there these days~.

Actually..... I kind of use AI sometimes, but not to generate the story from the scratch, like only to refine language, proof read and sometimes for word choices... And in some short scenes I feel too boring to write

 

[Ararara]

I wouldn't delete them, it only takes a minute to read ch1, but you do you. And also on Chapter4 there's some extra line breaks (Enters, new rows) in the middle of a sentence. Looks like a formatting accident to me

My blood ran
cold.

Bandits. Of
course there were bandits. Because why wouldn't there be?

They are
always the first enemy in every isekai—Right?

No—Sometimes
it’s goblins

 

[FrenzyWanderer]

Thank you so much!!!

I wouldn't delete them, it only takes a minute to read ch1, but you do you. And also on Chapter4 there's some extra line breaks (Enters, new rows) in the middle of a sentence. Looks like a formatting accident to me

Finally got a proper review

I wouldn't delete them, it only takes a minute to read ch1, but you do you. And also on Chapter4 there's some extra line breaks (Enters, new rows) in the middle of a sentence. Looks like a formatting accident to me

Wait I used a different software to write ch04, not microsoft word

Holy crap! There might be a issue after copying into the text editor here
Thank you again for pointing out