Hello!
I've read your first chapter and I could say that, well, you need a lot of improvement on your work. One of those that you need to be careful upon is your capitalization. For example:
"I looked at the Weapons again,
There were Sword, Shield, Bow - Arrows, Spears, and many more i didn't the know the name of."
Unless it is a proper noun, you should refrain from capitalizing nouns like 'weapon', 'shield', 'sword', 'bow and arrow', and 'spears'. A proper noun is the name of a person, place, animal, etc., like "Taeyang Lee", or "Korea".
Second are the redundant words. Redundant words are those that are often repeated, and it can be awkward to read. For example:
"The air was cold, and that cold air was hitting my face as i was standing at the edge of the rooftop."
On the first part of your sentence, you already stated that the 'air was cold', so you don't have to write 'and that cold air was hitting my face...' because your readers already know that the air, or wind, was cold by the first phrase.
Don't worry, it's one of the common mistakes a lot of non-native English speakers commit. But do watch out for that.
As for punctuations, if you're going to use a question mark (?), make sure to use only one symbol. If you're going to use period (.), it means that the sentence has ended, while comma (,) is usually for combining two separate ideas (sentences or phrase) together. An ellipsis (...) is for statements that are unfinished, and is only limited to three dots.
"I" is used to refer to the speaker, or narrator, and it's capitalized.
As for the chapter itself, for me, you have communicated your ideas well, though it's hampered with above-mentioned mistakes. I think it'd be better if you take my suggestions, but in the end it's still your decision. There are also other writers here that are better than me, so you can take their advice as well.
As for the entire story...I can't say anything yet. Aside from the fact that it's only one chapter long, it's one with a system. I do love 'isekai' stories (I'm writing one as well), but I never liked the ones with systems (I feel that the characters are not human, see?).
In any case, please continue with your work. Don't be discouraged by low readers and incoming 'negative comments' (like mine, I guess). I sincerely hope you'd find joy in writing like I do.
P.S.: More suggestions!
You can also improve your storytelling by formatting!
Like, italics often indicate a character's inner thought. Or bold for emphasis, usually important words, or sentences. 'These' are used to show a new terminology, or phrase.
