Book Idea (Looking for Feedback)

[Comatoast]

Basically, I'm a busy person who has never had enough time to write consistently. Instead of forcing a square peg into a round hole or sacrificing time with friends or work, I've decided to instead make a book that works for me.

With that in mind, here is the premise.

A man wakes up from a coma from a construction incident to be given a task from a divine power.

His task is to build a staircase to "the light", beams that filter in beyond the clouds above.

Every day is a rotation that sends him deeper into his psyche by different amounts each time and adds another ring to the plane om which he builds.

As the rotations progress they get darker and darker with deeper traumas, fears and regrets taking physical form in attempt to inhibit him from finishing his staircase.

Basically, I'm a busy person who has never had enough time to write consistently. Instead of forcing a square peg into a round hole or sacrificing time with friends or work, I've decided to instead make a book that works for me.

With that in mind, here is the premise.

A man wakes up from a coma from a construction incident to be given a task from a divine power.

His task is to build a staircase to "the light", beams that filter in beyond the clouds above.

Every day is a rotation that sends him deeper into his psyche by different amounts each time and adds another ring to the plane om which he builds.

As the rotations progress they get darker and darker with deeper traumas, fears and regrets taking physical form in attempt to inhibit him from finishing his staircase.

Just know that the chapters can range from very short to moderate in length and act almost as one-shots of important experiences of that day that expand upon the story in small, near slice of life style amounts.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Sounds a bit like a modern (or perhaps postmodernist?) take on Dante's Inferno.

 

[ConansWitchBaby]

Sounds damn good.

 

[1011010]

I think it's an interesting book idea
Would definitely read

-(These are things I noticed and not to be taken as criticism)

I don't quite understand the goal he's achieving because of how you worded it it's really confusing

Every day is a rotation

Are you going for a time loop

His task is to build a staircase to "the light", beams that filter in beyond the clouds above.

This makes it sound like he's dead and this is a test for the afterlife

that sends him deeper into his psyche by different amounts each time and adds another ring to the plane om which he builds.

"On* which he builds."

"ring to the plane on which he builds" This feels like it has some important plot points in it specifically

Is it like he's going inside his own psyche literally like inception or figuratively like facing his fears and self doubt.

(Overall I really like the idea)

 

[Comatoast]

I think it's an interesting book idea
Would definitely read

-(These are things I noticed and not to be taken as criticism)

I don't quite understand the goal he's achieving because of how you worded it it's really confusing

Are you going for a time loop


This makes it sound like he's dead and this is a test for the afterlife


"On* which he builds."

"ring to the plane on which he builds" This feels like it has some important plot points in it specifically

Is it like he's going inside his own psyche literally like inception or figuratively like facing his fears and self doubt.

(Overall I really like the idea)

To flesh it out a bit more;

The goal is to build a staircase to the heavens. It's revealed through a vision after day of sluggish progress that if he doesn't hurry, he will never make it back to his body to reunite with his loved ones.

Not going for a time loop but the afterlife thing is a bit more of a step in the right direction. He essentially in Limbo.

The plane he stands starts as a very small grassy Grove. He can't move far at first because the first set of people and memories he has are the ones from earliest childhood.

Every rotation the sphere of land expands by a sizable amount and new people approach the point on which he builds. They can be people he found compelling from Media, family members, anything that would have an impression on his psyche.

Yeah, It's like inception except his sole goal is to escape before he goes so far back that the light dims and he can no longer find his way out.

Sounds a bit like a modern (or perhaps postmodernist?) take on Dante's Inferno.

A little bit.

It's supposed to show insight into the mind, power of thought, the nature of hope and show us where we draw our influences from.

It has a few mild religious undertones as well to match the character's background as the American everyman.

 

[ZombieHat]

Basically, I'm a busy person who has never had enough time to write consistently. Instead of forcing a square peg into a round hole or sacrificing time with friends or work, I've decided to instead make a book that works for me.

With that in mind, here is the premise.

A man wakes up from a coma from a construction incident to be given a task from a divine power.

His task is to build a staircase to "the light", beams that filter in beyond the clouds above.

Every day is a rotation that sends him deeper into his psyche by different amounts each time and adds another ring to the plane om which he builds.

As the rotations progress they get darker and darker with deeper traumas, fears and regrets taking physical form in attempt to inhibit him from finishing his staircase.

Just know that the chapters can range from very short to moderate in length and act almost as one-shots of important experiences of that day that expand upon the story in small, near slice of life style amounts.

Interesting Ideas are a dime a dozen. What matters the most is execution. How will you make this something worth reading? How will the character draw us in? What can we relate to? Stuff like that is what matters more than the idea itself. I've read plenty of books that had me going, "Cool idea" only for me to DNF them.